10.20.2018

October Tanka


An autumn archway
of just-so bending branches
crowned with chimney smoke
rising on cold air
through star-frosted windows



Notebook poetry for Kerry in the Imaginary Garden!

10 comments:

  1. A pretty tanka. Please don't forget: I wrote to your tritina prompt.

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  2. This is soo beautiful, Marian!💞

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  3. It is amazing how seeing both versions offers a unique reading experience.. I could take away something different each time.
    I love your phrasing and line breaks.. and in all, so cool! Thanks for sharing your handwritten piece - it is so much more personal.

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  4. I agree with Kerry that the handwritten pieces seem more personal. I love how you've compressed the essence of autumn into five lines, Marian, which seem to expand in the handwritten piece.

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  5. Ah, such beautiful imagery. I loved this tanka with its chimney smoke and star-frosted windows.
    -HA

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  6. The image of that chimney smoke also seems like something from the past... nowadays it's all electric.

    Such a nice view of the nothebook

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  7. Marian, I love this form and yours is spectacular!

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