8.11.2017

Reverie

Between
stretchy clouds
   impossibly high
and bass so low
as to bring
vertigo
           Hyper-aware
                of gravity
     nimbus-strong
  and super-wish
           a tractor beam
   would end
All this
Izy’s prompt in the Imaginary Garden: WRITING UNSEEN

14 comments:

  1. LOL re Shay's comment. An intriguing poem. I feel the high, the low, the vertigo.

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  2. I can't decide if the speaker is warning what could happen or hoping it will happen.

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  3. I feel I am hyper-aware of gravity myself. Love this one! :-)

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  4. Very timely for me, Marian. For my tear able toothache, terrible to the ectent it is (still but two Aleve calm it a bit) making me an earache that thobs.
    So I broke a rule and took a Vicodin last night. That showed intriguing lighted patches which was a different color each time I looked and made my under leg three times as large and heavy as the other. Nature's Remedy...

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  5. Very timely for me, Marian. For my tear able toothache, terrible to the ectent it is (still but two Aleve calm it a bit) making me an earache that thobs.
    So I broke a rule and took a Vicodin last night. That showed intriguing lighted patches which was a different color each time I looked and made my under leg three times as large and heavy as the other. Nature's Remedy...

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  6. If there's a problem worth solving, it's worth solving with a laser! I love the surreally swirl and images. I get the feeling of a picnic in peril, a field too far. Beautiful, succinct, totally well done!

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  7. I like the thought of a stabilizing beam setting things to rights. So much in so few words.

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  8. Your poem has a great shape, Marian, which is made even more effective by the lines:
    ' impossibly high
    and bass so low
    as to bring
    vertigo'.

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  9. Luv the sci-fi quality, nice reminder that gravity is working

    much love...

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  10. That low bass will get us every time ..... enjoyed this!!

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  11. You New Yorkers ... I'm not sure what this reverie is asking for, but I sure would like to watch.

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  12. Reminds me of hay bailing time - standing high upon a stack of bales (sky almost within reach) and gravity (yes I worried about falling) and the radio on playing country music - men's voices deep and low singing ... and I grew tired by the end of day, wishing for any excuse to be allowed to go into the house... I'm SURE this is not what you meant but it brought me there...

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