7.25.2017

Working On a Building

What if
this structure exists
only in my mind,
these rooms
in which I pace
tile floors to carpet
are of my imagining,
our talks and lovemaking
the trusses
of my dreaming-home,
our silence and pain
but girders
for a grander scheme than we?
If so, it will take
more than a crane
to bring this baby down--

Late entry for Kim’s weekend challenge: BUILDINGS
Sharing on the Tuesday Platform in the Imaginary Garden

14 comments:

  1. Such anticipation and confidence in the strength of ideas in working out the impending structure. Great thoughts Marian!

    Hank

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  2. Love the way you've crafted this..so much said in so few words!

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  3. I love this!❤️ Indeed it wouldn't be easy to take it down!

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  4. All the emotions woven into your poem would be a fine and soun foundation for any building.
    our talks and lovemaking
    the trusses
    of my dreaming-home,.....Loved this

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  5. Very emboldened. I like the feeling of defiance in this.

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  6. Love the questioning of "reality"--and then the defense of same. Perception is reality. That's my story and I'm sticking to it--until something better comes along.

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  7. I love how you always come at a prompt at a divergent angle. From the opening line I knew it was going to be something special.

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  8. I love the shift in tone at the end - from passive to aggressive. Was that intended? I probably mis-read this, but loved nonetheless.

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  9. Love this drift of an imagination.
    Dream on...

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  10. I like so many lines n this but especially:
    our talks and lovemaking
    the trusses
    of my dreaming-home Indeed. It would be impossible for it to be brought down.

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  11. Oh Marian, I am so sorry - I only just caught up with your poem! It's a wonderful take on the prompt. I especially love:
    'our talks and lovemaking
    the trusses
    of my dreaming-home,
    our silence and pain
    but girders'.

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  12. Oh ...yes.. perspectives and realities... sometimes, maybe, we all wonder....liked the ending very much...has got power in it.

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  13. Stick to your guns...that's the ticket:)

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