4.26.2017

Hard(l-)y Out(side)

Feint
back
before
         losing hope
entirely
         as with
mourning blue buries
                betrayals
mount until too heavy to hold
           & limbs start breaking

(c) Karin Gustafson (all rights reserved)

NaPoWriMo Day 26! For Karin’s prompt in the Imaginary Garden: OUTSIDER ART and featuring her whimsical but somehow weighty artwork.
Posted by Marian at 9:28 AM
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14 comments:

  1. OutlawyerApril 26, 2017 at 10:20 AM

    Hey Marian--your enjambment and word play are so effective here--each read shows a different layer/angle, each of which is illuminating--I love the last three lines particularly--(though not so into betrayals!) Thanks and thanks for kind comments. I've enjoyed reading your work very much and am glad to be back in the swing a bit. K.

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  2. JimApril 26, 2017 at 11:33 AM

    And then there will be
    Great crash iPad first
    ..

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  3. Sanaa RizviApril 26, 2017 at 12:34 PM

    Such stunning use of enjambment and wordplay, Marian ❤️

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  4. coke girl(s)April 26, 2017 at 12:42 PM

    Gorgeous.

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  5. Magaly GuerreroApril 26, 2017 at 1:00 PM

    I did wonder what was breaking its neck. Guess you knew...

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  6. Paul John DearApril 26, 2017 at 2:33 PM

    Like the plant in the picture I feel my head is bent now.So many ways to read this.

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  7. brudbergApril 26, 2017 at 3:47 PM

    So very clever... love the blue buries.

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  8. Kerry O'ConnorApril 26, 2017 at 5:01 PM

    mourning blue buries

    So filled with poet envy right now...

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  9. DeApril 26, 2017 at 5:07 PM

    "mourning blue buries" is simply brilliant. Wish I wrote it.

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  10. ~Rasz~April 26, 2017 at 5:14 PM

    Beautiful. Fits perfectly with the drawing. "mourning blue buries" nice!

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  11. AnonymousApril 26, 2017 at 6:25 PM

    Well written pause...

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  12. Rosemary Nissen-WadeApril 26, 2017 at 9:53 PM

    I too loved the different readings possible – though all adding up to the same sad conclusion.

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  13. Susie ClevengerApril 27, 2017 at 1:07 AM

    It is like falling into hopeless.

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  14. grapelingApril 27, 2017 at 1:29 AM

    so sad ~

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