4.16.2016

If We Are Not Careful

Soon comes
the implosion
when distance
finally digests itself
secreting apprehension
like so much fertilizer
and I will be left
looking back
tending the fragile thing
that once
(or was it a dream)
was a firecracker


Photo by Karin Gustafson

Lucky (?) #13 in April, for Karin’s prompt to the Real Toads: REMAINS OF THIS MONTH

Editing to add this little haiku I scribbled last night and promptly forgot. You know, it helps with my goal for April!
wild, wild Friday night
new battery in her book-light
finds her own delight

19 comments:

  1. There are some remains we should be careful to touch.. like something sore of explosive...

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  2. Oh...geesh...this image gave me the creeps. You really brought a vivid story to it...great work, Marian!

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  3. you germinated a stunning ekphrastic poem from that really creepy image

    much love...

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  4. This is just great, Marian. The ending and the lack of punctuation other than parentheticals so powerful. The actual image is by someone named bel-- something. Hedgewitch would know as she posted the true photo on her fb once. I just saw it at met-- thanks. K.

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  5. The sense of something broken that suggests its wholeness almost more vividly than something whole could do--an ambiguity that drives perception, and a very sharp poem to frame it, Marian. That photo is terrifying..

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  6. I agree, this is an incredibly written ekphrastic poem.. kudos!!

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  7. Such an interesting and unnerving piece. You have taken the concrete to the level of the abstract in an altogether admirable way.

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  8. and I will be left looking back......... great job with a startling picture.

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  9. Oh wow! "looking back, tending the fragile thing that once...was a firecracker." Right where I am at, my friend. So well expressed.

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  10. I am having a lot of trouble commenting on blogs. But I just wanted to say from your implosions to firecrackers to "tending the fragile thing"--that juxtaposition IS FANTASTIC
    -Amy

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  11. when distance finally digests itself...Wow! It is hard to take care of the pieces..There are times I wonder if I was ever whole.

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  12. Some remains shouldn't be unearthed... not if we aren't ready for the boom.

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  13. The warning is indeed to be taken, your poem creates (to me) a person afraid of being broken and searching for an answer.

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  14. I love that last line -- it surprised me!

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  15. I'm adoring that little haiku! Are you spying on me?

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  16. Interesting how you converted what is generally regarded as explosive - firecracker - into implosive energy. A clever piece of writing.

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  17. The self is burbling alembic, for sure, and vessel sometimes looks in hindisght like a toidy. That ribbing aside, you go right into what the heart does, turning experience into soul. Mythologizing the mess. Emerson hated what books had become. In the hand, he said, a book should be a ball of fire.

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  18. Oooh...wow....this little piece of poetry packs a punch!

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