1.Your hairis a tall talefantasticundercurrentsbarely contained2.Yourscascadeslike headwatersseeking confluencein your heart3.And yoursstrokes yesterdaybehind your earsoverflowsin favor of someday
Number Six for Poetry Month! For Kerry’s Get Listed prompt to the Real Toads: COMPOUND WORD EDITION
Ah sweet. I keep imagining your little boy's picture. (I think.) Lovely. k.
ReplyDeleteMade me think of my grandson's and all their different hair styles. Nice
ReplyDeleteAh, this is just superb work, Marian. I think hair can be a most beautiful part of the body, and you have captured that sensuous glory so well.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely gorgeous..!!
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely, I especially like the first stanza (if that's the correct term) The poem speaks to me of love.
ReplyDeleteSame here!
DeleteI picture their faces as I read. Smiles.
ReplyDelete1. Son
Delete2. Daughter
3. Old man
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So good.
DeleteI was trying to go for rivers of hair here too. I don't know, this whole thing started with thinking "your hair is a tall tale" and then I obsessed over the compound word list and took the descriptions to the water. :)
ReplyDeleteI really love this... hair has been an obsession of mine in some of my recent poetry too... it's almost a personification of hair...
ReplyDeleteI like this too, Marian. Are you writing about my friend, Willie Nelson?
ReplyDeleteFun reading, Marian, and more fun trying to figure it. Thank you for your hints above here for Sherry. I don't think I've ever used 'hair' in my writings here, literally or other. The third verse, if literal, sort of describes my friend, Willie, and me. We both are old. He can 'sing', I cannot.
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nice head shots;)
ReplyDeleteI love that first stanza, especially.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful head of hair this is. I love the last stanza, especially the last line.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely conceit, or series of.
ReplyDeleteLove this trio of thought on hair. :)
ReplyDeleteA hair-raising trio emitting some rather hairy thoughts. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteYes, I could see your family in this one. What a creative way of describing them.
ReplyDeleteMy 17 year old son cut his long hair last week ~
ReplyDeleteI have always found long hair so beautiful, on either sex, and here you really give it a life of its own, an extension of our lives, a connection to our natural selves, time and each other. Much loved it, Marian.
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