2.06.2016

Nightcrawler

Sidewalk
worm’s gratitude
for sun
following a rainstorm
must be short-lived
blistering
confusing
like the shudder
after flutter
inside
upon car door slam
outside
I felt I was drowning
flailing
bloated
floated
to the surface
warmed myself
belly to the sun
now you’re home
finding yourself
amongst worms
surfacing
inside your brain
and I’m parched

Flash 55 Plus for Real Toads!


15 comments:

  1. Sometimes the waiting almost is worth it... But one might wonder.

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  2. Ha. This is so clever. One certainly has that feeling of the wait that may then lead to something pretty hot--whether torrid or blistering. I especially can imagine a life with young children here! But also just life. Thanks, Marian. k.

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  3. Nice; got some 'belly' in mine too

    much love...

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  4. Wow, a powerful description of this state.

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  5. I get the feeling that your thirst was sated before he got home, but now that he's returned, you're parched again. I'm probably wrong though. That's just what I see.

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  6. surfacing
    inside your brain
    and I’m parched

    Obviously ready for some wonderful moments together. Great lines Marian!

    Hank

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  7. You approached your theme from such a unique angle, Marian, and seemed to stretch out those 55 words to include so much.

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  8. That ending should make him tremble (but is it a good thing?).

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  9. Wow, i love the way this poem just tumbled out. Fun!

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  10. Sometimes saving oneself - well, isn't what we think... And we must quickly adjust or well, get stepped on ;P

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  11. This is so interesting, Marian...love the metaphors within and the sound of "shudder/flutter" fun!

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  12. Poet as earthworm gets a new perspective.

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  13. Leaves me wanting spring so I can go fishing. Lol!

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  14. Leaves me wanting spring so I can go fishing. Lol!

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