Sidewalkworm’s gratitudefor sunfollowing a rainstormmust be short-livedblisteringconfusinglike the shudderafter flutterinsideupon car door slamoutsideI felt I was drowningflailingbloatedfloatedto the surfacewarmed myselfbelly to the sunnow you’re homefinding yourselfamongst wormssurfacinginside your brainand I’m parched
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Sometimes the waiting almost is worth it... But one might wonder.
ReplyDeleteHa. This is so clever. One certainly has that feeling of the wait that may then lead to something pretty hot--whether torrid or blistering. I especially can imagine a life with young children here! But also just life. Thanks, Marian. k.
ReplyDeleteNice; got some 'belly' in mine too
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Eww! brain worms. runz away
ReplyDeleteWow, a powerful description of this state.
ReplyDeleteI get the feeling that your thirst was sated before he got home, but now that he's returned, you're parched again. I'm probably wrong though. That's just what I see.
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and I’m parched
Obviously ready for some wonderful moments together. Great lines Marian!
Hank
You approached your theme from such a unique angle, Marian, and seemed to stretch out those 55 words to include so much.
ReplyDeleteThat ending should make him tremble (but is it a good thing?).
ReplyDeleteWow, i love the way this poem just tumbled out. Fun!
ReplyDeleteSometimes saving oneself - well, isn't what we think... And we must quickly adjust or well, get stepped on ;P
ReplyDeleteThis is so interesting, Marian...love the metaphors within and the sound of "shudder/flutter" fun!
ReplyDeletePoet as earthworm gets a new perspective.
ReplyDeleteLeaves me wanting spring so I can go fishing. Lol!
ReplyDeleteLeaves me wanting spring so I can go fishing. Lol!
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