1.03.2016

Beehive Cafe

We sat
across a table
dappled with butter sun
Sipping black coffee
dustgazing
smoke snaking
reading the newspaper
Here take this
you proffered
a book of matches
Stood
hitched jeans on hips
took your leave
People don’t still do that
I thought
But sure enough
a number scrawled inside
And I was left
to decide

Flash 55 for Real Toads!

17 comments:

  1. This made me smile. Sadly it's all about Whatsapp and Facebook messenging these days. The nuance of conversation is becoming a thing of the past.

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  2. There are a few dinosaurs still roaming, thankfully!

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  3. Dustgazing... The perfect shared moment I think :-)

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  4. I like it, Marian, it reminds me of my freedom days, my sixth life. Only instead of smoke snaking mine would be smoke rings settling.
    Do you ever watch the old Frazier reruns on the Hallmark Channel, starting midnight CST? They are old fashioned remembered. Frazier never can have a lasting relationship but he doesn't give up.
    ..

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  5. Ah--charming. I love the dustgazing also--just terrific. very vivid, wonderful. k. (Watch out!)

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  6. Ah so sometimes they still do things like that ... nice to have a decision to make ;-) Bastet

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  7. So much is retro -- the cafe, coffee, smokes, newspaper, hitched jeans, matchbook ... even love!

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  8. I think maybe people will always do that...great visuals in this, Matian.

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  9. This feels so personal, maybe because you named the cafe, maybe because you talk to the reader midway through in an aside (which are my favorites for catching the reader off guard). Lovely awkward, hopeful scene:)

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  10. Very sweet. A really great snippet of life.

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  11. Oh, I like this... a little scandalous.

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  12. Relationships are often presented in awkward fashions that one is provoked into making a decision or taking sides. Great thoughts Marian!

    Hank

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  13. Hmmm....I didn't know people still used matchbooks or left numbers on them. I so enjoyed the and its dilemma. :)

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  14. What a delicious exchange. I was there, looking at her face as she waited to make her decision. :)

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