Observationof your profilein oration,recollectionof my body respondingto your entrance,reflectionon infatuationwith unfortunateswho had every intentionof returningto their backwater ways
A little exercise in response to Karin’s weekend challenge in the Imaginary Garden, and #15 of 30 Poems in November to benefit Center for New Americans.
I love your word choices. The clarity of meaning could not be more strongly felt.
ReplyDeleteThe returning to backwater ways sounds less than good... great choice of words that resonate with meaning.
ReplyDeleteHa-- Marion-- a lot squeezed in this short ooem. I especially like the title-- of course the sound is really interesting but the layers of meaning manage to have their own echoes. Thanks for playing along and good luck with your quest. K.
ReplyDeleteNot for the faint hearted looking full faced at past mistakes or heartaches
ReplyDeleteMuch love...
Great rhythm in this. And the word choices are spot on
ReplyDeleteYou nailed it! I try to avoid "reflection on unfortunates" from my past. Sadly, the title of my memoir has already been taken: "A Series of Unfortunate Events", LOL.
ReplyDeleteWow, and the last line...says it all~ I love your poem and your approach
ReplyDelete"backwater ways" That speaks so much to me.
ReplyDeletePretty smooth operator here, Marian. I am intrigued with your line,
ReplyDelete"of my body responding." Some how I just can't picture what and how
This, one time, I can remember, ...
Oops, that was your rough draft beginning line.
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