10.25.2015

Hollowest

Fingering bone-deep contusions
Signs warn caution, bumps ahead
Or you’re dead.
Abiding (no hiding)
Source of burnt-brown dread
Broiling with worried wonder,
Ashes turned under.

Margaret unearthed the Dunbar stanza introduced by Kerry for PLAY IT AGAIN. Again!

9 comments:

  1. Wonderful rhythm in this piece, and perfect rhymes... Like a High-noon shootout.

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  2. Interesting style, well played.
    ZQ

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  3. I like, Marian!! And I will head the caution signs as I have an aversion to being in ashen form.
    You did well with the Dunbar form, I liked your rhyme as Dunbar did. I used the form but decided to forgo the rhyme except for the middle, internal rhyme line. I noted she would like it seasonal, fortunately we had an October storm here in Texas.
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  4. Potent and powerful writing, my friend......"broiling with worried wonder". A strong sense of foreboding.

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  5. Ah! You are the master(mistress?) of short forms, Marian! I love all your words. This has a marvellously dark, October flavour.

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  6. Signs warn caution,
    bumps ahead
    Or you’re dead.

    Can one be faulted for not heeding it! Cool rhyming Marian!

    Hank

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