10.25.2015

Hollowest

Fingering bone-deep contusions
Signs warn caution, bumps ahead
Or you’re dead.
Abiding (no hiding)
Source of burnt-brown dread
Broiling with worried wonder,
Ashes turned under.

Margaret unearthed the Dunbar stanza introduced by Kerry for PLAY IT AGAIN. Again!
Posted by Marian at 1:31 PM
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9 comments:

  1. brudbergOctober 25, 2015 at 2:31 PM

    Wonderful rhythm in this piece, and perfect rhymes... Like a High-noon shootout.

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  2. AnonymousOctober 25, 2015 at 4:09 PM

    So good.

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  3. R.K. GaronOctober 25, 2015 at 4:20 PM

    Interesting style, well played.
    ZQ

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  4. MargaretOctober 25, 2015 at 10:54 PM

    Very nice!

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  5. JimOctober 25, 2015 at 11:15 PM

    I like, Marian!! And I will head the caution signs as I have an aversion to being in ashen form.
    You did well with the Dunbar form, I liked your rhyme as Dunbar did. I used the form but decided to forgo the rhyme except for the middle, internal rhyme line. I noted she would like it seasonal, fortunately we had an October storm here in Texas.
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  6. Sherry Blue SkyOctober 26, 2015 at 11:58 AM

    Potent and powerful writing, my friend......"broiling with worried wonder". A strong sense of foreboding.

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  7. Kerry O'ConnorOctober 26, 2015 at 12:23 PM

    Ah! You are the master(mistress?) of short forms, Marian! I love all your words. This has a marvellously dark, October flavour.

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  8. BlogorattiOctober 27, 2015 at 6:58 AM

    Interesting piece of writing.

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  9. kaykualaOctober 28, 2015 at 10:27 PM

    Signs warn caution,
    bumps ahead
    Or you’re dead.

    Can one be faulted for not heeding it! Cool rhyming Marian!

    Hank

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