Fingering bone-deep contusionsSigns warn caution, bumps aheadOr you’re dead.Abiding (no hiding)Source of burnt-brown dreadBroiling with worried wonder,Ashes turned under.
Margaret unearthed the Dunbar stanza introduced by Kerry for PLAY IT AGAIN. Again!
Wonderful rhythm in this piece, and perfect rhymes... Like a High-noon shootout.
ReplyDeleteSo good.
ReplyDeleteInteresting style, well played.
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Very nice!
ReplyDeleteI like, Marian!! And I will head the caution signs as I have an aversion to being in ashen form.
ReplyDeleteYou did well with the Dunbar form, I liked your rhyme as Dunbar did. I used the form but decided to forgo the rhyme except for the middle, internal rhyme line. I noted she would like it seasonal, fortunately we had an October storm here in Texas.
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Potent and powerful writing, my friend......"broiling with worried wonder". A strong sense of foreboding.
ReplyDeleteAh! You are the master(mistress?) of short forms, Marian! I love all your words. This has a marvellously dark, October flavour.
ReplyDeleteInteresting piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteSigns warn caution,
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Or you’re dead.
Can one be faulted for not heeding it! Cool rhyming Marian!
Hank