Remember that conversationabout a void, the stars,another dream? Only last week,far from the cavernyou’re stuck in now.Consider constellationsas chill embraces youlike a long-dead lover’s arms.Scratch them on the wallssufficiently crypticallyfor posterity to wonderwhat caused that collision,so much heat, such bright nights.
For Corey’s prompt to the Real Toads: THE CAVERN OF MY THOUGHTS
Consider constellations
ReplyDeleteas chill embraces you
like a long-dead lover’s arms.
Quite an intense vibe flowing through this magnificent poem :D
Loved the title too..! Beautifully done :D
Lots of love,
Sanaa
So much heat, such bright nights.....wow I love that line. You said this was craziness, I think its absolutely wonderful, I love when they start off with remember that or remember when, usually means something good is coming. Awesome Babyluv...Over!
ReplyDeleteYour words are vibrantly alive — yet they make me fear for the fate of your protagonist.
ReplyDeleteThis is a stellar write, you draw your reader right in and close magnificently. Wowzers!
ReplyDeleteto be stuck can be very tedious
ReplyDeleteScratch them on the walls sufficiently cryptically for posterity to wonder
ReplyDeleteAny cave dwelling poet would be proud of all the lines you've written today.
It spoke to me on so many levels. I felt flush and chilly all at once.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful, as all your words are.
The maps out of that cave can't be read in the dark, but I can hear the directions loud and clear in this jewel-like poem, where the shapes in the dark frighten only until the light enters the picture.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is riveting from first line to last as you take us from cave to constellations and back again. I love the image of words scratched on cave walls.
ReplyDeleteI too am intrigued with "scratch them on the walls..." lest we forget. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI love how the dark and stars ties into your closing thoughts...brings it back but in a new way...great write, Marian!
ReplyDeleteWonderful--terrific for the prompt and on its own--really one feels the cave, but real life too. Thanks, Marian. k.
ReplyDeleteTo be there in the darkness waiting and try to draw the past from constellations. Truly wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThis really fit Corey's "The Cavern Of My Thoughts" prompt perfectly! Your words put us in a place we've all been before. Scratching out cryptic words for others to decipher later.
ReplyDeleteOh, this. Wow.
ReplyDelete