6.11.2015

What Drove You In, What Keeps You There

Remember that conversation
about a void, the stars,
another dream? Only last week,
far from the cavern
you’re stuck in now.
Consider constellations
as chill embraces you
like a long-dead lover’s arms.
Scratch them on the walls
sufficiently cryptically
for posterity to wonder
what caused that collision,
so much heat, such bright nights.

For Corey’s prompt to the Real Toads: THE CAVERN OF MY THOUGHTS

15 comments:

  1. Consider constellations
    as chill embraces you
    like a long-dead lover’s arms.

    Quite an intense vibe flowing through this magnificent poem :D
    Loved the title too..! Beautifully done :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  2. So much heat, such bright nights.....wow I love that line. You said this was craziness, I think its absolutely wonderful, I love when they start off with remember that or remember when, usually means something good is coming. Awesome Babyluv...Over!

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  3. Your words are vibrantly alive — yet they make me fear for the fate of your protagonist.

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  4. This is a stellar write, you draw your reader right in and close magnificently. Wowzers!

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  5. Scratch them on the walls sufficiently cryptically for posterity to wonder

    Any cave dwelling poet would be proud of all the lines you've written today.

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  6. It spoke to me on so many levels. I felt flush and chilly all at once.
    This was beautiful, as all your words are.

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  7. The maps out of that cave can't be read in the dark, but I can hear the directions loud and clear in this jewel-like poem, where the shapes in the dark frighten only until the light enters the picture.

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  8. This poem is riveting from first line to last as you take us from cave to constellations and back again. I love the image of words scratched on cave walls.

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  9. I too am intrigued with "scratch them on the walls..." lest we forget. Beautiful.

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  10. I love how the dark and stars ties into your closing thoughts...brings it back but in a new way...great write, Marian!

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  11. Wonderful--terrific for the prompt and on its own--really one feels the cave, but real life too. Thanks, Marian. k.

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  12. To be there in the darkness waiting and try to draw the past from constellations. Truly wonderful.

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  13. This really fit Corey's "The Cavern Of My Thoughts" prompt perfectly! Your words put us in a place we've all been before. Scratching out cryptic words for others to decipher later.

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