5.22.2015

Crash

snare drum
  tek
  tek
rattling out
  tek
  tek
list of offenses
  tek
  tek
not listening
  tek
  tek
not remembering
  tek
  tek
making you feel
  tek
  tek
you are one of many
  tek
  tek
  CRASH

Christ I’m sorry
  (sad trombone)
  tek
  tek
you are the only one
  CRASH
  rattle
  tek


It’s Fireblossom Friday in the Imaginary Garden.
Posted by Marian at 4:45 PM
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17 comments:

  1. FireblossomMay 22, 2015 at 5:08 PM

    I don't think this band is going to stay together for many albums! Cool take, Marian. :-)

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  2. Sanaa RizviMay 22, 2015 at 5:49 PM

    Quite an innovative take on the prompt! :D
    Loved it :D
    xoxo

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  3. Buddah MoskowitzMay 22, 2015 at 6:56 PM

    Love it - Mosk

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  4. cosmos camiMay 22, 2015 at 6:56 PM

    Bring on the deafening noise! Love the forgetting, the absorbtion into music.
    Well done and fun originality!

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  5. DeMay 22, 2015 at 7:46 PM

    Cool take.

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  6. JimMay 22, 2015 at 11:22 PM

    Snare drummer on the wild! Beware! Take cover!
    This was nice, Marian. Something a little different from you.
    ..

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  7. brudbergMay 23, 2015 at 2:02 AM

    This felt familiar, a music you shouldn't play too often.

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  8. grapelingMay 23, 2015 at 2:59 AM

    sad trombone... what a perfect line ~

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  9. Kerry O'ConnorMay 23, 2015 at 5:44 AM

    Brilliant!

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  10. colleenMay 23, 2015 at 10:25 AM

    Love this beat nik mult-sensory poem.

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  11. Mama ZenMay 23, 2015 at 12:05 PM

    Oh, this is cool!

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  12. SusanMay 23, 2015 at 2:50 PM

    Whether taken as an apology or a schtick, the final crash truly feels like an end.

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  13. Rosemary Nissen-WadeMay 24, 2015 at 4:16 AM

    I loved it too! :)

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  14. GailMay 24, 2015 at 11:25 AM

    sad and good

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  15. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 12:12 PM

    I love this.

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  16. hedgewitchMay 24, 2015 at 12:17 PM

    Great jabs in the short list lines here, Marian, and every one hits home.

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  17. HannahMay 24, 2015 at 6:13 PM

    Wow...this is impacting, Marian. Really cool approach and relate-able topic.

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