4.10.2015

To Posterity

Sorry
for leaving you
lurched aching like android
unsettled travellers farther
faring
Sorry
but we disbelieved in further
gestures hoping wayward
longing would wave
goodbye

#10 of 30 in April, for Mama Zen’s prompt to the Real Toads: DEAR PAST, DEAR FUTURE

8 comments:

  1. This is exquisite...! Love the concept of the past and future depicted here.. giving off a sense of determination to set things right!
    Loved it :D

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  2. So good, Marian - love the "unsettled travelers" and the wayward longing waving goodbye.

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  3. "We disbelieved in further gestures" love that line

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  4. Wow, I feel like I just read a note from the distant star!
    So, cool

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  5. i first read disbelieved as disheveled. guess that says more about me, though. my kids don't even talk much to me anymore though, so hard to say goodbye ~

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  6. I like the way your voice to the future is kind of cut up by the cinquain form, as if the message may only reach them in small pieces. Heaven knows what communication will be like for our great-grandchildren - probably monosyllabic or made up entirely of acronyms.

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  7. Oh dear, failing them by carelessness! Brilliant capture of the tone.

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