Read a book aloud, observingthe space between words
A long hair in the shower lookslike the Madonna and child
Peek in on your sleeping daughterblanketed in snowlight
Oncoming traffic headlight starsare maybe moons
Globe of frustrationbehind your eyes
Lost baby tooth,canine
Still lightat 5:30
(With apologies to Wallace Stevens.)
"your sleeping daughter blanketed in snowlight". I can see her. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteEach stanza immortalizes a moment - a glance, or frisson of light so easily over-looked by any but a poet.
ReplyDeleteKerry is so right - I esp love the first one.
DeleteA sleeping daughter blanketed in snowlight- a lovely scene.
ReplyDeleteThe visuals here are so effective a stimulus to the inner eye, Marian. I do find a soft echo of Stevens, but without that stiff steel he seems to slip even into moonlight, leaving the feel of snow, cold and sometimes too perfect. Here the light is white but gentle.
ReplyDeleteI too admire each moment revealed… a beautiful poem through and through.
ReplyDeleteI think the way all these moments tie to the snow moon in the title that gives this such precious precision ...
ReplyDelete'the space between words' - lovely observation
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely. Not a wasted word.
ReplyDeleteah, those early morning hours....
ReplyDelete"Peek in on your sleeping daughter
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very sweet....luv this
much love...
i only count 7 ways. this poem is only half-written. ;)
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DeleteI wouldn't have caught the similarity to Stevens until you mentioned it and then saw two of his poems conflated. How to have the mind of winter and see it with a multiple eye? Dunno where you're holed up this February, but this poem feels buried under the weight of it. Something balanced between each pair of lines, is it the despair or weariness of having to think and see only winter?
ReplyDeleteSnowy western Massachusetts, though we have FAR less snow, and more room to pile it up, than our comrades in Boston and surrounds. Yikes!
DeleteI really enjoyed this Marian--especially the parts about the car lights as stars or maybe moons and the transition to globes. Still light to me seems in part like "still life" as if each picture is a little still life of sorts. Though I also felt that it described this time of winter when light does go a little bit longer and we wake up to it. Thanks. k. (Manicddaily)
ReplyDelete"still" cold mean silence and all these things observed in those moments of calm and reflection… Beautiful
ReplyDeleteonly snow moon light
ReplyDeletecan illuminate the space
between your words
namaste
jzb
A sweet scene that transports me.
ReplyDeleteThank you, friends. Wasn't sure if all these images work but a few of them are keepers.
ReplyDeleteall keepers, Marian ~
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