runaway sentence.: Daybreak Over Chicopee (original!)

1.02.2015

Daybreak Over Chicopee (original!)

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line

between

    cloudy grey

& hematite grey

    constitutes earthly boundary,

aspirations too other-wordly
            for mortal hearts.

10 comments:

AnonymousJanuary 2, 2015 at 1:35 PM
Almost haiku-like in feel, but has a slightly surreal feel to it that I think a haiku would find difficult to contain. Chicopee has never been so beguiling.
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Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 2, 2015 at 2:49 PM
I love the way this looks upon the 'page'. Such a sumptuous choice of words.
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LauraFebruary 17, 2015 at 6:12 PM
I can see it.
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Rosemary Nissen-WadeFebruary 17, 2015 at 9:43 PM
Very visual — on and off the page. :)
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AnonymousFebruary 18, 2015 at 5:22 AM
What an interesting tag-poem, "fibonacci" -- a construction of itself ending up "too other-worldly/for mortal hearts." Such fine, feral compression.
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AnonymousFebruary 18, 2015 at 11:36 AM
It is surreal.. Chicopee has that quality to it. Unlike any other place in MA. well-written.
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Björn RudbergFebruary 19, 2015 at 12:54 AM
Love the color imagery of the fib.. And how you used the lines to create an additional effect.
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Gillena CoxFebruary 19, 2015 at 1:23 AM
quite an interesting sharing

http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2015/02/25.html

much love...
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Magaly GuerreroFebruary 19, 2015 at 10:19 AM
Such a dreamy picture of the horizon...
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SusanFebruary 19, 2015 at 11:59 PM
This works wonderfully, a pause in the turning of time, a yearning.
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