Meet me in the glintwhere wind meets lightas memory fadeswith your appetite for Blue
Only we two birds,fledging low below clouds,are finally ready to Dive--pinched nose, holding hands
Once we’re deep under,twine your legs round my legs--your Heart withers so cold below,don’t you dare let go.
Flash Fiction 55 at Real Toads.
Googled the title and find it is a real body of water. Great memories are made from such nights as these...
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing piece of poetry this is. I never once got the impression that it was written under the restriction of 55 words. It is perfect, and so much in your style. Poetry to make me weep, and feel envious at the same time.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully crafted Marian ~ Hope you are well ~
ReplyDeleteThe title itself sounds like a poem.
ReplyDeleteThat first stanza just blew me away. Gorgeous!
ReplyDelete"meet me...where wind meets light...." OMG. I love this - especially "dont you dare let go."
ReplyDeleteIf memories could regenerate ... if lakes could talk! Can you imagine the scene?
ReplyDelete"Meet me in the glint
ReplyDeletewhere wind meets light"
I'd say something intelligent but all that came to mind was "wow".
:) Love it, Marian. My take is that the two birds are 'love birds' taking a dip together in their bird bath. Sounds very romantic with the 'hand' (birds?) holding and the sensuous body contact while there.
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Oh yes, I am not a total tea totaler, that was just part of my poem. But a six pack of beer is likely to last a whole month in our house.
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love that first verse ~
ReplyDeleteThe great moment- when we're finally ready to dive. Nicely described.
ReplyDeleteNot an extraneous word or image--fine writing, intense and feeling and luminous, Marian.
ReplyDeleteyou'll laugh, but i actually DID add a few words that i think are totally extraneous in order to get to 55. :)
Deletethank you, dear friends!
ReplyDeleteLove your opening Marian and the imagery of clouds and deep...well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful...I can't believe it was created under the restriction of 55 words...
ReplyDeletethank you, friends! xo
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