6.17.2014

Let's This Poem Be

This poem is a crane
hoisting beams like backbones
offering a gentle swing
embraced in a sling
righting what's been wronged

This poem is a swimming raft
on glistening water
bob-beckoning like bed
steadying limbs
bearing weight of the dead

This poem is you
singing your song for me
your rock carrying my siren
like a womb
pre-born and as yet unbroken.

Inspired by Hannah Gosselin’s wonderful post: This Poem is a Hoe
Posted by Marian at 11:56 AM
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14 comments:

  1. Sherry Blue SkyJune 17, 2014 at 12:12 PM

    O!M!G! This is a.....FANTASTIC POEM!!!!!!!! I so love it. This form is catching fire, isnt it the coolest? Yay, Hannah!

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    1. MarianJune 17, 2014 at 12:17 PM

      thank you, Sherry!
      i love the idea! go Hannah!!! i didn't follow all the rules, as the repetition for the boomerang thing she described didn't seem to fit this little poem. but in the interest of participation, and of stretching myself to write something maybe a bit longer than i normally would, i'll try another. :)

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  2. Kerry O'ConnorJune 17, 2014 at 12:19 PM

    This is such an amazing poem. I love the form of each stanza and the way each image has been woven from the single thread of the first line. How great is it to find inspiration from our sister poets?

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    1. MarianJune 17, 2014 at 12:25 PM

      xoxo sister-poet! i'm still STILL working on my Yeats verses for you, too.

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  3. Arushi AhujaJune 23, 2014 at 8:46 AM

    I love love the last stanza which describes this poem as "me" i wish i could actually sing a song for you...

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  4. colleenJune 23, 2014 at 9:03 AM

    Love it. This is my style poem. I especially like the image of a poem as a crane gently swinging and righting what is wrong.

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  5. JimJune 23, 2014 at 10:28 AM

    I love it too, Marian. It is hard to read the last verse without (at least for me) placing MYSELF in the "you" spot, 'Some day your love will come, when I appear.'

    BTW, I've been asked not to sing in a church choir. That was in New Hampshire after I had been 'singing' in a choir and a men's chorus for several years in El Paso. I might sing again, in Heaven.
    ..

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  6. AnonymousJune 23, 2014 at 11:02 AM

    I fell in love with Hannah's form and the poems she wrote. You've added your own brand upon the form and it is just as lovely.

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  7. TimoteoJune 23, 2014 at 12:52 PM

    I did a poem called "This Poem" and this poem reminds me a lot of that poem.

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  8. kaykualaJune 23, 2014 at 5:48 PM

    It's a great new form. And you've done it most aptly, Marian! Wonderful shot!

    Hank

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  9. Susie ClevengerJune 23, 2014 at 9:53 PM

    Amazing!!

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  10. cosmos camiJune 24, 2014 at 3:45 AM

    Yeats verses? He's my favorite!
    This poem lifts me like a crane.

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  11. AnonymousJune 24, 2014 at 4:47 AM

    Perfectly compressed and articulated. A "swimming raft" "bearing weight of the dead" is stunning.

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  12. MarianJune 27, 2014 at 4:06 PM

    thank you!

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