12.18.2013

Christmas Recess

Full
moon,
twinkly
lites eclipsed
by Santa’s shadow
boozing down the Chimney tonite--

For Peggy’s prompt to the Real Toads: Holiday Memories
Posted by Marian at 11:09 PM
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12 comments:

  1. SusanDecember 18, 2013 at 11:26 PM

    I like the booze ooze combine here, tho in my life I like the twinklies to overpower it. Dear Santa!

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  2. Susie ClevengerDecember 19, 2013 at 1:29 AM

    I agree with Susan...hopefully there will be more twinkle than booze...

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  3. Kerry O'ConnorDecember 19, 2013 at 4:11 AM

    This is the other side of the picture, isn't it? Christmas lite, too much booze and artificial lights.

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  4. MarianDecember 19, 2013 at 10:21 AM

    maybe this poem doesn't come off as dark as it feels to me.

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  5. Mama ZenDecember 19, 2013 at 11:14 AM

    No, it definitely came off dark to me. Really well done, Marian.

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  6. PealogicDecember 19, 2013 at 4:06 PM

    Something definitely slimey and unpleasant about your Santa.

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  7. Kay L. DaviesDecember 19, 2013 at 5:21 PM

    Oh, yes, Marian, I can feel the dark of that one word eclipsing the moon and any amount of twinkling.
    Luv, K

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  8. PeggyDecember 19, 2013 at 7:14 PM

    The poem seems about happy things until--boom--along come booze oozing Santa to make it very dark indeed. Very effective I think. Thank you so much for posting.

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  9. AnonymousDecember 19, 2013 at 8:13 PM

    the only time you can Fib and get away with it around Christmas. Course, if Santa's lit up, he wouldn't notice anyways ~

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  10. cosmos camiDecember 19, 2013 at 9:04 PM

    It could go either way. Dark or dark humor...more evidence of the magic of poetry.

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  11. Sumana RoyDecember 20, 2013 at 6:39 AM

    ouch...shadowy Santa....enjoyable lines..

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