A girlgoes to the hospitalfor a brain testbecause the doctorsmight want to change the pillsshe takes for seizures.They stick wiresall over her headwith what feels likebubblegumand she wonders how she’ll everget all that gum out of her hair.She doesn’t knowwhat they are measuringas their machinesstart their scribbling,but she hopes to hell it’s truethat they can’tactually read her mindbecause she can’t stopher thoughts from racingwith monstrous imaginings.
Penned for Write on Edge: Bubblegum
I wish they could read these natural fears and then maybe act compassionate and then read some gratitude for paying attention. Such a neat way to capture this phenomenon!
ReplyDeleteNothing quite so private as our thoughts ... and best kept that way! This was wonderful.
ReplyDeleteOh now I'm worried for her about the results. Great capture, kiddo, and I hope this is fiction.
ReplyDelete100% true story, but it all worked out. :)
DeleteOur thoughts tucked away...nice, Marian.
ReplyDeleteExcellent. You have infused a very real situation with a touch of the surreal - from worries about the gum in her hair to machines which could possibly read our thoughts, expose those monstrous imaginings!
ReplyDeleteSometimes I think that the best place to be is inside my own thoughts, and I rarely let anyone know everything I am thinking. Some of it is Mine.
ReplyDeleteYour words always hit me right in the middle of my chest, and make me THINK and Ponder.
It's better that we have that private place for our thoughts. Your words were well chosen. Bravo.
ReplyDeleteSo odd the things we think when we are afraid.
ReplyDeletetrue enough!
ReplyDeleteThe idea of her thoughts creeping out to the machine is arresting. I loved this piece.
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