5.22.2013

Orchard Malingering

Recounting haunts of appled
Cheeks, dappled hair wrapped tightly
Round aching wrist, my habit
Having been kidnapped, nightly

Now I pine for sleep, respite
Long, deficit apparent
Like death’s last inventory,
Our story untold, unspent.

Karin challenged the Real Toads with a word list containing (among others) dapple, hair, inventory, malingers, wrist, and habit.

16 comments:

  1. Ooh, Marian, I love this: the ancient Celtic form, with your haunting words.
    K

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    1. thank you, Kay! i really like that form.

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  2. haunts of appled
    Cheeks, dappled hair wrapped.. I love the rhymes and repetitions in these few lines. The words blend seamlessly into the poem, never feeling forced or chosen by anyone other than you.

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  3. Great eerie-sort-of mood here, a fine ambiguity, and a lovely cadence--the Welsh forms are always so musical(and difficult!)Deficit/respite is just inspired, Marian.

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  4. Wowzers! A fantastic write. The last stanza is especially potent.

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  5. untold, unspent... I want to save her!

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  6. I too like that last verse ~ Fascinating form, one which I haven't tried yet ~

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  7. Marian, I did not know of this Welsh form. Perhaps it can be a Real Toads form prompt? That way, I could learn the ins and outs of awld gwydd. Thanks for this, a real corker! Amy

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    1. we did this form quite a while ago, here's a link:
      http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2011/10/croeso-i-gymru.html

      maybe it's time to do it again. i really like this, and its related forms.

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  8. Haunting and poignant. So distilled-- makes for mystery and also a kind of sensuality. Thanks. This is Karin Manicddaily on phone stuck on blogger.

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  9. An eerie feeling but the words just flow to fall in place a little rhythmic sets the mood and must say that you capture one in the title too!

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  10. The words flow perfectly without any hint that the words were chosen, beautifully done.

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  11. I love this: "my habit
    Having been kidnapped, nightly"

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  12. Hopefully a good night worth the sleep deficit?

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