5.18.2013

Igneous At The Core

Granite,
lined like bookbinds,
stratified loneliness--
a pressing, lengthening of limbs,
heaviest words, incapacitated.
I am closed to your ideas,
rejecting your outcrops;
My heart’s weight in
granite.

Grace has challenged the Real Toads to write a rictameter. I've worked with this form but not lately, and had forgotten. Thank you, Grace!

18 comments:

  1. Heavy words, heavy heart!
    Well expressed, Marian.

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  2. I would think this is familiar as the first part is a cinquain, your fav form ~

    You chose a terrific refrain, granite ~ Love the form and ending image, heart weight in granite ~

    Have a lovely weekend Marian ~


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  3. The feeling of this reflects the word granite. Heart in granite a particularly strong image i think.

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  4. Sometimes we need to make our Heart strong as granite indeed

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  5. Unique and wonderful link of granite, book spines, loneliness! Being closed takes on multiple meanings, some good though sad.

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  6. Trust you to do the longest line in three words!
    (Show off!)

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    1. PS. And take us down some cold hard steps into the human heart...

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  7. Oooh Marian, I like the long words.
    I bet you do joined-up writing too :-)
    The outcrops are such a good metaphor for somebody else's opinions.

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  8. Igneous? Makes the word ignoble want to partner it...

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  9. I love what your topic or first and last lines employ and the change from bookend to heart's weight...excellent!

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  10. Great job with this form, Marian!

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  11. Granite is almost passe these days, too, Marian. You see it on every second person's countertop. I don't blame you for rejecting it.
    K

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  12. Your description of granite in nature is awesome. Stone Mountain in the Atlanta area is amazing .... I love visiting.

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  13. i like this one, too. thanks for all your comments, friends.

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  14. This is excellent, I am attempting rictameter for the first time myself right now, it is a challenging form and you have mastered it!

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