Granite,lined like bookbinds,stratified loneliness--a pressing, lengthening of limbs,heaviest words, incapacitated.I am closed to your ideas,rejecting your outcrops;My heart’s weight ingranite.
Grace has challenged the Real Toads to write a rictameter. I've worked with this form but not lately, and had forgotten. Thank you, Grace!
Heavy words, heavy heart!
ReplyDeleteWell expressed, Marian.
I would think this is familiar as the first part is a cinquain, your fav form ~
ReplyDeleteYou chose a terrific refrain, granite ~ Love the form and ending image, heart weight in granite ~
Have a lovely weekend Marian ~
The feeling of this reflects the word granite. Heart in granite a particularly strong image i think.
ReplyDeleteSometimes we need to make our Heart strong as granite indeed
ReplyDeleteUnique and wonderful link of granite, book spines, loneliness! Being closed takes on multiple meanings, some good though sad.
ReplyDeleteTrust you to do the longest line in three words!
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PS. And take us down some cold hard steps into the human heart...
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DeleteOooh Marian, I like the long words.
ReplyDeleteI bet you do joined-up writing too :-)
The outcrops are such a good metaphor for somebody else's opinions.
Igneous? Makes the word ignoble want to partner it...
ReplyDeleteI love what your topic or first and last lines employ and the change from bookend to heart's weight...excellent!
ReplyDeleteGreat job with this form, Marian!
ReplyDeleteGranite is almost passe these days, too, Marian. You see it on every second person's countertop. I don't blame you for rejecting it.
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Your description of granite in nature is awesome. Stone Mountain in the Atlanta area is amazing .... I love visiting.
ReplyDeleteLoved the metaphoric use!
ReplyDeletei like this one, too. thanks for all your comments, friends.
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent, I am attempting rictameter for the first time myself right now, it is a challenging form and you have mastered it!
ReplyDeletethanks!
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