4.14.2013

stonecutter

I might need a pick
to chink loose
words
pinging in my brain.
Better yet to chisel
love
from a concrete heart.

Joaquin Sorolla, Victor Hugo's House in Passages
Hedgewitch provides a gorgeous review of Joaquin Sorolla's paintings for the Sunday Real Toads challenge. Poem 14 of 30! Harder than it looks, friends.

Posted by Marian at 4:31 PM
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15 comments:

  1. hedgewitchApril 14, 2013 at 5:14 PM

    Nice marian--those concrete hearts, they're hard to work with but a helluva metaphor-(-I just used that phrase yesterday--great minds, etc.) I like the painting you chose, too. Glad you found Sorolla had something to help chink the words out with. It does get harder as the month goes along.

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyApril 14, 2013 at 6:07 PM

    oooooo, that is such a great line - to chisel love from a concrete heart.

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  3. Kay L. DaviesApril 14, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    Sherry (as she often does) said what I wanted to say. I love those words.
    K

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  4. GraceApril 14, 2013 at 7:16 PM

    Love that last line too ~

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  5. EllaApril 14, 2013 at 8:51 PM

    I love a concrete heart ;D
    Yes, sometimes we need a good chisel~

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  6. Susie ClevengerApril 14, 2013 at 11:33 PM

    I too love the line ...to chisel love from a concrete heart. Working your magic Marian through verse. Circumstances have me behind in my goal of 30 poems in 30 days. I will work to catch up!

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  7. JinksyApril 15, 2013 at 7:28 AM

    Excellent words and picture match...

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  8. Loredana DonovanApril 15, 2013 at 8:49 AM

    Love it! Great last line :)

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  9. KirApril 15, 2013 at 9:12 AM

    and if it were easy to chisel from concrete, if you were assured it would be worth it, I think a lot more of us would pick up the instrument.

    the words brought more color to the picture.

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  10. Kerry O'ConnorApril 15, 2013 at 11:06 AM

    Every verb you have used in this poem adds to the effectiveness of this metaphor. Such an interesting choice of picture, with words to bring it into context.

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  11. Old OllieApril 15, 2013 at 1:19 PM

    concrete hearts are so difficult - cool poem M. - keep 'em coming. 1/2 done.

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  12. HelenApril 15, 2013 at 1:26 PM

    May my heart never turn to concrete ...

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  13. Tara R.April 15, 2013 at 2:27 PM

    So much emotion in so few words. Each one perfect.

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  14. MargaretApril 15, 2013 at 9:41 PM

    Well, beautiful, your "pinging' words :)

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  15. MarianApril 16, 2013 at 1:15 PM

    awww sigh my friends, glad you like this little cutey. :)

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