4.21.2013

Spring Lune (-acy)



bitter morning rooms
secede as
kids fling windows wide


oldest question yet:
whose man in the moon
is up there?


waiting for the day
violets
blanket the whole lawn


spring welcomes girls
skipping city sidewalks, sporting tears
in jeans knees


Grace has introduced a new (to me, anyway) form for the Real Toads (and you!) to play with: the LUNE. 1 & 3 here are my first attempts at the Kelly Lune, which has a syllable count of 5-3-5. 2 & 4 are samples of the Collum Lune, which has a WORD count of 3-5-3. I’m gonna count all of these as one... so the Lunes are number 21 of 30 for National Poetry Writing Month. Getting there!

21 comments:

  1. Opening the windows and seeing those violets and girls skipping about, will make my day ~

    Happy to see you trying both forms dear ~ And I smiled at the title, ha ~

    Thanks for participating in Sunday's Challenge ~

    and Congrats on your 1/day poem for April ~

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  2. Love the title! Yes, whose man is caught in the moon. Each one of these is a treat!!

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  3. This is really vivid! And, I (naturally) love the title.

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  4. These are so good Marian--I have a really hard time with things this short, but yours are just blinding. lovin the violets-(-I just planted some yesterday, actually--one I'd never seen that looks more like a tiny pansy. I have white ones, too.) Your first here is a classic.

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  5. Enjoyed your lunes so much,,,every one a celebration or anticipation of spring,,,the third one is my favourite,,,I love violets,,,

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  6. I always love snippets of things your kids say and ask in your poems. Such bright children you have.

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  7. I really love two and three, well done

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  8. These are all beautiful reminders of the approach of Spring, and lovely to read on the day I saw our first snows on the mountains.

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  9. A very nice collection. I am waiting for those violets as well....but sense it may be a while.

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  10. You weren't really planning to get four days' worth of poems out of these, were you :-)
    BTW, what colour are/will be your violets? white or purple?

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    1. i really wasn't. :)
      ours are both purple and white, more purple than white. they don't cover the whole lawn, yet! maybe one day.

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  11. Spring lunacy is one of my favorite kinds of lunacy. Children's questions are my favorite kinds of questions. So I love this poem/these poems, Marian. And I'm still smiling about your 7-year-old's compliment for my Toad and Lark poem.
    Violets on lawns don't happen every year here, but when they do...wow!
    K

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  12. Wonderful sequence. I knew flinging the windows wide would be magical. Spring enters like a child.

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  13. Beautiful-guided by the magic of youth and spring!
    Love it~

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  14. These are all wonderful but, the second one makes me ponder and I like to ponder.

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  15. .... R.E.M.'s man is up there on the moon, of course!!!

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    1. you mean Andy Kaufman looks down up on all of us? ;)
      well, that's somehow comforting.

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  16. thanks for your comments, dear friends.
    it's Spring here now, for sure, though i have yet to feel warm. i guess any day now! :)

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  17. These are so vibrant. I love the image of violets all over the lawn. Yes, that is the essence of spring for me. Wonderful lunes.

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