4.10.2013

document of discussion: Cuckold

I had to tell her the truth
and I did, almost immediately,
after trying to say with my words
and indicate through my actions
that everything was not all right
and I was falling for someone else.

I told the truth, in a night
of anger, pain and recriminations,
accusations of cheating, lying,
disrespecting and cuckolding,
pacing, name-calling, threat-hurling
and the fear of physical violence.

When all that truth was out, she said
I hope you stay together. Otherwise,
it will be like you just threw me away.
I laughed. What did that even mean?
This was about me and her, not about
him and me. But, as it turns out,

The truth is: We Are Still Together.
For Izy's Document of Discussion prompt to the Real Toads, poem number ten in April!

20 comments:

  1. That third stanza really got to me. It made me think.

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  2. A poem as real as this one is, must make us all pause to reconsider some of the hardest conversations we have had ourselves.

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  3. Genuine conversation captured so fluidly, Marian...excellent and nerve-wracking!

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  4. I love how you captured the bitter and the sweet~
    SO happy it ended well!
    I too love the genuine convo you conveyed :D

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  5. the last stanza is so painful and real, amazing job

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  6. I reckon there's a novel in there somewhere, trying to get out.

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  7. This is a really interesting poem,,,I'm sure most of us can remember some bitter quarrels even if they weren't about the same thing. You have touched a nerve and a memory. I enjoyed reading it.

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  8. Oh, it started off so civilized, until that second stanza....that one brought back some wicked memories, Marian. How easy it is to descend from civilization to recrimination and beyond.
    Well done.
    K

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  9. I can see how this piece may leave you feeling exposed, but I find the truthiness here important to highlight. Realism (in my humble opinion) is hard to capture in a poem, and yet you ahve done this with great success. the middle verse I found particularly relatable in it's simplest form.

    I told the truth, in a night
    of anger, pain and recriminations,
    accusations of cheating...
    I love the final line you have invoked here,it has a sly tone of a lover proved right or at least of a decision well made.


    Well done, you and viva la

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  10. So much clarity in 'it will be like you just threw me away' ~~ I think it would feel that way.

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  11. Wow! You manage to encapsulate a life-changing experience in this brief conversational piece. Smart writing, Marian!

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  12. You outlined a whole story here. That third stanza in particular has a strong impact. Excellent.

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  13. On record? Oh, I hope so. Else it is just to surreal. I would have to revisit it again and again and still wonder what hit me!

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  14. Otherwise,
    it will be like you just threw me away.

    I can feel how hard it is for both sides here, but the line above is what defines the issue. Very nice.

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  15. I don't know. I might have said the same thing she did. This got me where I live. Really vivid and immediate stuff, Marian, no matter how long ago it actually happened. You re-animated it.

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  16. Ha!

    But heart-wrenchingly emotional too, and I feel kinda honored to read something about this part of your life - I think this is the first time I have (read about this).

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  17. :) well, okay, glad this resonated. thank you, friends and xoxo

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  18. my heart felt like it was beating around the stanzas...so real and raw, thank you for sharing this.

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