2.06.2013

otherwise bombogenesis

She adhered
to merciless missing
the way a drunk can’t shake
the innocent amber liquid
that burns going down
and swelters from the inside.

It was her secret,
the simple holding on;
such a tangible desire
that even a flicker of loss
would require an assault,
conflict of great magnitude.

A complex question, then,
woven like dreams of giving
clouds plus nervous-service:
What will the explosion be like
when opposite but equal forces
collide? Projected bombogenesis.

Fireblossom set the Toads loose with an A+ word list today, from which I believe I have managed to use seventeen in this little poem. I took liberties with the forms/tense of many of the words. Bombogenesis was not on the list, heh.

14 comments:

  1. Whew, harsh! Cuts brilliantly into the hidden refusal to let go as an addiction, so that, yes, I can feel the building into the big burst of ____! I'll hope for the best.

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  2. "nervous-service" awesome. this poem reads like a shot to the gut. :)

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  3. Missing...refusing to let go equaled to addiction..I can feel it in this piece.

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  4. Packs a humdinger punch, this poem...

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  5. Bombogenesis. I had to look that up! What a good word. Did you know that it replaced the less successful Dumbogenesis, in which unsuspecting elephants were swept up by...well, no, I suppose that may not be strictly true.

    I think I met the subject of your poem, once. All a person can do is hide in the storm cellar until they run out of steam.

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  6. "it was her secret, the simple holding on;" a terrible tension in this, a pull and drag tug of war between life and death, caring and nihilism..or so I read it...really well done, marian, from first to last with a gradual build to abrupt explosion/resolution.

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  7. This really packs a wallop, Marian!

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  8. Agree with other commenters= this holding to loss very palpable. k.

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  9. So good, hard hitting and heart hitting too. Nice use of the words!

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  10. Bombogenesis ... maybe it SHOULD be in the dictionary! Awesome write!

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  11. Best description of a drunk's beloved ever!

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  12. ..holding on often isn't very easy. Very intriguing.

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  13. Bombogenesis? Birth by explosion? I don't know where you found that word, but it is ultra-creative, and for some reason I feel I identify too closely with the persona of this poem. Must be those awful memories of failed love rising to the surface.

    She adhered to merciless missing... Ain't that the killer?

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  14. i learned the word "bombogenesis" from a friend who is a self-described weather nut. isn't it the best??

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