1.22.2013

sobriety

Listen to sullen songs
    Breathe through swollen lips
  Wallow in missing Things
You have no business
       Considering
  What you have to lose
That you’d choose Imagined
   Bruises on pinkest lips
       Is too much to contemplate.
Posted by Marian at 9:49 PM
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7 comments:

  1. Way too much. I love these images: sullen, swollen, wallow as they echo echo and the sounds appear again in choose and bruise. Rhyme and repetition also make your essential point. Bravo!

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    1. thanks for this comment, Susan. i started this with the idea of "sullen songs" and was writing for the sounds... then when i got to "considering" i realized it could be a clever little turning point. i liked writing this.

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  2. Oh yeah... flow, turn, go. Great form. And the singing sounds engage the reader.

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  3. Oh yes. definitely one of, IMO, your best pieces.

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