She comes in striking distance,
Your shore rises, greeting her--
Thunder breaks over you, sanguine
Like waves of feverish sound.
Kerry's weekend challenge to the Real Toads: Jueju
10.21.2012
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Kerry's weekend challenge to the Real Toads: Jueju
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I love this!
ReplyDeleteI like the feverish sound and the title as well ~
ReplyDeleteAfter a weekend of thunderstorms and being surrounded by water, I feel these words most emphatically. I love the strength of your imagery.
ReplyDeleteHi Marian,
ReplyDeleteI keep in forgetting that you are the runaway sentence :-)
Nice image of the shore greeting.
Love the way you mix up the senses here, visual, sound and tactile, and a very cunning little metaphor too. And all executed in perfect form--I thought it was a very productive one to work with, and it certainly looks that way for you too.
ReplyDeleteWow..a lot said in such few words..
ReplyDeleteJust gorgeous--lush and full---
ReplyDeleteSanguine...love that...a perfect word to express!
ReplyDeleteThe poetic form and eroticism ~~ done well!
ReplyDeleteSO perfect, Marian, all that in only one quatrain. You rock.
ReplyDeleteK
"striking distance" is such a beautiful way to bring me right into the middle of this space.
ReplyDeleteI loved the erotic place you took me.
Just damn near perfect, frankly.
ReplyDeletesanguine... lovely word. This form suits you.
ReplyDeleteyou people are too kind. xoxo
ReplyDeletelove this
ReplyDeletenaturally ;) xo
Deletedove in to your poems - got sated with sated - great one!
ReplyDeleteahh, thank you, kind sir :)
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