Withdraw to rummage inwardly,
wound like a cyclone risks break,
churning ache.
Ample cost infers loss,
now poised to awake.
Hurricane preparedness
distracts from unless--
Kerry's weekend challenge for the Real Toads is to try a Dunbar stanza.
10.28.2012
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Kerry's weekend challenge for the Real Toads is to try a Dunbar stanza.
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I know exactly what you mean by 'rummage inwardly' - wish I could get out of that habit. Sometimes the 'unless' is the worst thing in the circumstances.. the false hope.
ReplyDeletebreak/ache/awake
ReplyDeleteI love it when rhyme sounds differ in spelling.
So sorry for the frightening weather you are having.
That Hurricane Sandy is causing all sorts of angst!!! Nice poetry ....
ReplyDeleteHope you get through it safely, kiddo. Keep us posted, okay? We had a huge earthquake on the west coast last night. It's all pretty scary, especially to those of us who watched An Inconvenient Truth.
ReplyDeleteBe safe...I know I'm happy I still have the power!
ReplyDeleteYes, lots of inward rummage ;D
hope you weathered it well, Ellen.
DeleteHurricane preparedness sounds too scary even for October, Marian.
ReplyDeleteWeather is so frightening because we're so helpless against it. Sherry on the west coast, where my family lives, with the earthquakes. You with Hurricane Sandy. The high winds we get here on the prairie, threatening the tall trees behind our house, one of which dropped a large branch on the dog's favorite outdoor sleeping place recently.
Take care of yourself.
K
You've managed to pack a lot into this one, Marian--the feeling of pressure and things poised to go sideways is strong. The ending especially. Good work, and good luck out there--take care.
ReplyDeleteEchoing the sentiments toward your safety...that being said...well done on this form, Marian...I enjoyed the phrase "inward rummaging." :)
ReplyDeleteI'm in Philly--too distracted by Sandy to do the necessary "Withdraw to rummage inwardly. . ." and I know well what you mean. My mind is often on this storm or another one. But your poem itself is wound tight! Release, if you can, and breathe. Be safe.
ReplyDeleteSusan, hope you are okay in Phila! xo
DeleteOh, hope you're safe! Opening and closing lines are both strong.
ReplyDeleteThinking about you during this horrible storm. Keep us posted!
ReplyDeleteVery cool poem = this rummaging inwardly is a hard one. Where are you? I'm in NYC - I live in the Battery so had to move yesterday. Hope all is okay -
ReplyDeleteI love the end of this poem - it is amazing how this outward busy-ness both brings us to what is important, but also takes us away from it - a churning for sure. Thanks. k.
hope you are okay! news from NYC is horrible.
Deletei'm in western MA and we were spared the worst of it.
Be safe Marian,
ReplyDeleteeden
thanks, everyone! we are just fine. many were not so fortunate :(
ReplyDelete"rummage inwardly" I have done a lot of that in the eye of hurricanes I have faced in the past. I certainly know the fears of those who have/are facing Sandy. So thankful you are fine. My heart and prayers go out to those who not as fortunate.
ReplyDelete...one reason we chose NOT to even take a look at New Bern, NC. The middle of the state suited me fine! Stay safe, and we'll await to hear how you are.
ReplyDeleteall's well here! we are fine. sending love to NYC and NJ :(
ReplyDeletethis poem for me is metaphorical, staring down a bad weather system but reflecting on other things.