10.31.2012

hallows

If I had a heart, and if it were true,
she would protect me from ghost-dancing moon;
No filthy ogre, no shadowy cur
or ghoulish rage to make my belly stir.

If I could follow an angel within,
wear her like a blanket, a second skin;
No more night terrors, no reason to scream,
only beachy nasturtiums in my dreams.

If I had a heart, and if it were true,
sleeping in comfort and waking with you,
swaddled in moonbeams, wrapped up in the sky,
no more crossing fingers, hoping to die--

With tell-tale heart dunked in shimmery light,
the nights are wholesome, then no planets strike.

The Real Toads are writing ghost tales today! My first line here is attributed to the great Charlie Chesterman (the song is called "If I Had a Heart" from Studebakersfield), and the last line is from Hamlet. Happy Halloween!

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  1. O wow! This is my favorite with full swing on meter, alliteration, rhyme, hope, happy, o--your narrator clearly has both heart angel:
    "If I had a heart, and if it were true,
    sleeping in comfort and waking with you,
    swaddled in moonbeams, wrapped up in the sky,
    no more crossing fingers, hoping to die--"
    All in good time.

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  2. Wow! A sonnet (my fave all-time form)for Halloween. This is a delightful romp through quatrain and couplet with such excellent imagery, from a ghost-dancing moon to beachy nasturtiums. I love it!

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    1. maybe you know that the sonnet is one of my least favorites! but i felt it was necessary to write a sonnet once i landed on the quote from Hamlet. respect, you know :)

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  3. I love, love, LOVE this - with its lovely lilt, "wrapped up in the sky"....."dunked in shimmery light".....and upbeat message. Stay safe tonight, kiddo. Hope the storm is abating. Did you weather it well?

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  4. Lots of fun references here, Marian, especially the Poe. The sonnet structure gives it a sort of spell-mumbling cadence, too. Good stuff!

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  5. This is fantastic! So much to love that I can't pick out a favorite thing!!

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  6. This was wonderful...it imagery, its magic cadence feel!
    I love what you have done...
    I have to read it again ;D

    Very Clever Marian!

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  7. wear her like a blanket, a second skin;
    No more night terrors,

    That is so comforting a thought! Nicely done... Happy Halloween.

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  8. This is so beautiful, Marian. I love it.
    K

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  9. So lovely ... the third stanza blew me away.

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  10. Lovely sonnet...Happy Halloween ~

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  11. I so love the ones you write wherein I have to read it aloud, just to get the full flavor of it - delish!

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  12. it IS fun to read out loud, isn't it? boo!
    thanks, everyone and xoxo

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  13. I still LOVE this sonnet and its swing into the positive ...

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    1. thank you! it's a rare poem of my own that i still like a year later. so there's that. :)

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  14. One of my favorite-gorgeously outlined details make me bask in your verse!
    Bravo Marian~
    I do love beachy nasturtiums
    ;D

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    1. beachy nasturtiums, orange? halloween? i guess so.

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  15. "sleeping in comfort and waking with you,
    swaddled in moonbeams, wrapped up in the sky," beautiful imagery.

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  16. If you did?! Do you not? Cool rhyme and conjectures, marian ~

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  17. I so love this poem. Love the rhythm and lilt of it so much!

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  18. Happy Halloween! Pulling the chin to read your sonnet, Marian...lol

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  19. Such a wonderful Halloween piece...the third stanza is my favorite!!

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    1. mine, too. i think it's why i still like this one a year later. :)

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  20. "wear her like a blanket, a second skin" - loved this line in particular.

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    1. glad you like that line, it kinda grosses me out. !

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  21. What a clever choice of bookends! :)

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  22. Ha! I thought I missed a prompt (which I did this weekend as we took a mini road trip. I was attracted to the same lines as last year ... "wear her like a blanket, a second skin; No more night terrors," :)

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  23. This sonnet is fabulous. Using others for first and last line, alluding to Poe, and romping around on your own with such strong images and infectious rhythms. Good stuff!

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  24. Hi Marian ~~ I like this one. I like Mr. Tin Man also, he is my profile picture buddy.
    Mr. Tin Man has no heart.
    ..

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  25. thanks for your kind words, friends. yay!
    i just re-worked this poem to submit to a "dark & stormy night" contest. haha!

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