9.24.2012

sevenling (city in broad daylight)

Fifth Avenue's ice cream truck melody
riffs off a hot dog stand generator,
bucket-drummer rhythm section.

They say Times Square's washed clean.
Still, tourists rub up against poverty,
drunk executives, sad men in Elmo suits.

It's all gone under cover now.

This weekend's challenge to the Real Toads is the sevenling, a form I like a lot. And yeah, I know it's Monday night.

10 comments:

  1. men in Elmo suits? I'm not a NY'er.... ? When we toured DC I loved the pick up bands that would make wonderful sounds from barrel, jugs, etc. (that is what you meant by riff off a hot dog stand generator?)

    Can you tell I am not a big city girl? :)

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    1. there are people in Times Square dressed up as various characters, kinda like in Hollywood, but they're more on the little-kid scale, for the most part (Elmo, Dora, Hello Kitty, stuff like that) and they are VERY grungy and beaten-down looking. it's rather depressing. i do like the sounds described in the first stanza, and in some places they're all going at once, like a street orchestra.

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  2. I love the image of someone in an Elmo suit on NY sidewalks.......but then I once dreamed I attended a wedding where the groomsmen were all teddy bears dressed in suits - LIVE teddy bears!

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  3. This has a great gritty feel to it, Marian. Grew up in Chicago so I know the clean is not even skin deep, but a lot of people make a living covering it up. You're a natural with this form.

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  4. Excellent! You conjure up the mood of the city so well here, and I agree with hedgewitch that the form suits your style immensely.

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  5. This is certainly timely .. this morning on the Today Show we learned via Travel & Leisure ... NYC is the dirtiest city in the USA!!

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    1. i love NYC but it is really gross. literally and metaphorically :)

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  6. washed clean, under cover -- all riff and counter riff in a life that feels suspended and as fast as ever.

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  7. I was at NY last year and was just bombarded with the sights of commercialism including these characters...yeah tried one of those hotdogs too ~

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  8. yes, it is rather overwhelming. midtown (and especially times square) is very mall-like now, depressingly so, but for the seedy bits you can see peeking out here and there.

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