If you squint, I will blur
so you won't notice the detritus
flying around my head like angels
and trailing behind me as if
to mark the path for you to follow
when I veer away, itching, half-raw.
It's hard to lose someone who leaves
pieces of herself behind like that,
even harder to forget the image
of a woman burning, completely undone.
Please forgive me for clouding
your pillow, for sullying your dreams.
6.16.2012
skin deep
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This poem is so well written. Love the "detritus flying around my head like angels" and the image of a woman burning. Powerful work, kiddo.
ReplyDeletegorgeous and sad. and itchy.
ReplyDeleteThis is just brilliant - start to finish - and I believe that if one is to leave one's mark on another person's life, it should be scorched into their skin. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI don't know why, but something about this poem just sits with me, like I helped you write it. "sullying your dreams" what a gorgeous line.
ReplyDeleteStriking, simple, serendipitous in meaning for me personally--excellent write in all ways, Marian. Irony ftw. Or is that last bit sarcasm--I always get them confused. Either way, it rings my bells.
ReplyDeletesignature stuff.pithy poignant and remarkably powerful.
ReplyDeleteThe images are quirky, but wonderfully vivid. Tight and melodic, and top-shelf stuff.
ReplyDeletedelightful to the tongue
ReplyDeleteso glad! not so delightful to experience, to tell the truth.
ReplyDeletethanks, pals, for the love :)
I'd not want my bed-fellow to have to squint, to consider my trail detritus-filled. This strong write elicited a strong response. Nice work, Marian.
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This is hard to read, but must have been harder to live. Well done.
ReplyDelete"even harder to forget the image
ReplyDeleteof a woman burning, completely undone."
powerful, vivid imagery! i LOVE your writing!
♥
So happy I didn't miss this one!
ReplyDeleteIt is amazing, the fragments we all stir in each other!
This stirred me~
Thanks, it is wonderful!
oh, thank you, friends. *flies away in a cloud of dust*
ReplyDeleteok, i'm backed and i'm hooked on your runaway sentence :)
ReplyDeleteyay! being hooked is encouraged :)
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