6.16.2012

skin deep

If you squint, I will blur
so you won't notice the detritus
flying around my head like angels
and trailing behind me as if
to mark the path for you to follow
when I veer away, itching, half-raw.

It's hard to lose someone who leaves
pieces of herself behind like that,
even harder to forget the image
of a woman burning, completely undone.
Please forgive me for clouding
your pillow, for sullying your dreams.

16 comments:

  1. This poem is so well written. Love the "detritus flying around my head like angels" and the image of a woman burning. Powerful work, kiddo.

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  2. gorgeous and sad. and itchy.

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  3. This is just brilliant - start to finish - and I believe that if one is to leave one's mark on another person's life, it should be scorched into their skin. Wonderful.

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  4. I don't know why, but something about this poem just sits with me, like I helped you write it. "sullying your dreams" what a gorgeous line.

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  5. Striking, simple, serendipitous in meaning for me personally--excellent write in all ways, Marian. Irony ftw. Or is that last bit sarcasm--I always get them confused. Either way, it rings my bells.

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  6. signature stuff.pithy poignant and remarkably powerful.

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  7. The images are quirky, but wonderfully vivid. Tight and melodic, and top-shelf stuff.

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  8. so glad! not so delightful to experience, to tell the truth.
    thanks, pals, for the love :)

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  9. I'd not want my bed-fellow to have to squint, to consider my trail detritus-filled. This strong write elicited a strong response. Nice work, Marian.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/06/18/tucson-summer/

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  10. This is hard to read, but must have been harder to live. Well done.

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  11. "even harder to forget the image
    of a woman burning, completely undone."

    powerful, vivid imagery! i LOVE your writing!

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  12. So happy I didn't miss this one!
    It is amazing, the fragments we all stir in each other!
    This stirred me~
    Thanks, it is wonderful!

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  13. oh, thank you, friends. *flies away in a cloud of dust*

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  14. ok, i'm backed and i'm hooked on your runaway sentence :)

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  15. yay! being hooked is encouraged :)

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