6.21.2012

grey street

She turned toward her daughter, the broken glass still in her hand. "C'mere, baby girl. I could use a hug."

Her girl fell against her, wrapping sinewy arms tight, burying her face in her mama's bosom. She raised her up with one arm--even at six years old, her little one still weighed less than forty pounds--tossed the glass in the sink, plopped her on the counter and stood close.

"You okay, baby?" She brushed the hair from her daughter's eyes.

"I'm okay. I need to use the bathroom."

The girl kissed her on both cheeks. "Let's go, Mama."

This little story is being played out in 100-word increments, thanks to Lance of My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog. This week's 100 Word Song is "Grey Street" by Dave Matthews.

12 comments:

  1. If you pay attention to the lyrics, there's this sweetness in the girl's reflective attitude. you captured that.

    loved it...reminds me of my 7 year old

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  2. What a gorgeous way to capture that moment when a parent and child just need to comfort each other.

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  3. Real... touching... and well done as always! :-)

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  4. This is sweet. They are both worried about the other it seems. Such an adorable relationship.

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  5. children and parents who take care of one another, that is what you wrote. That it's not always the parent who comforts and heals, sometimes it's those tiny kisses from those tiny beings who love you. I felt each one.

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  6. You're too damned good, I tell ya! I heard my own daughter saying this as I read along, and I haven't heard her six year old voice in a little over eight years now.

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  7. this itchy storyline is killing me. too close to my home.

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  8. Those skinny arms have wrapped around me before and I've wondered, "who's comforting who?"

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  9. This really was a tender mom/daughter moment.

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  10. this gal needed some TLC, but i'm thinking maybe not to good to expect that from her little one. we'll see. thanks for reading and commenting, friends.

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  11. Sometimes we just need a hug, and when there's that moment when both of you are scared and it relaxing the tension. Is this the beginning? If so I like it!

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    1. unsure, really. i have written a few 100-word scenes involving this woman in her kitchen. we'll see what happens. thanks for reading!

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