Tonight our Most Capricious Moon
sails by, resisting cries of Soon
you'll leave us! You whorish playboy!
Won't you stay the night, once, enjoy
lovemaking spooned?
No. He waxes, glozes, blusters.
We, soaked with naked want, muster
up the strength to face Morning Sun,
who swaddles us. Yet we're undone
by Lamp's luster.
Kerry's weekend mini-challenge to the Real Toads is a lovely form, the florette. Try one!
Marian, I am going to have to go outside and take a look at the moon tonight. I don't want the 'whorish playboy' to escape without taking a look! I enjoyed your florette.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is just wonderful, Marian. Witty and sensual and poignant. I like the way you set out your florette with the last syllables of the fourth line carried over. I thought this would be a form you would enjoy, and you have wrought a wonderful thing here.
ReplyDeleteThat whorish playboy moon was flirting with the fog last night to wonderful effect.
ReplyDeleteAnd I love the form!
i liked this line a lot too!!
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Marvellous writing - poignant and playful and just so good.
ReplyDeleteOh, lovely. I'm a sucker for that whorish moon. Also, love your enjambment...very well done!
ReplyDeleteWhorish playboy moon..love that. You did an amazing job with the form
ReplyDeleteWow. What a delightful response to this prompt! Undone --- what a lovely thing!!!
ReplyDeleteFabulous, Marian. I also love the idea of a whorish playboy moon.
ReplyDeleteI was lucky enough to get snapshots of the moon last night, but my intrepid photographer was up north where the skies were cloudy. Unfortunately, my good camera is not behaving, so I was only snapping, not photographing.
Sigh.
K
I wanted an S on the glow, or a cape on the supermoon. I'll take whorish playboy.
ReplyDeleteI love the tone of this
I've only got one word for you - WOW! And I'll spell it backwards too - WOW!
ReplyDeleteNicely done indeed Marian--and much better without pudding. And with the right rhyme scheme. Ending on 'luster' makes the piece really sing.
ReplyDeleteVery nice take on the moon ~ The metaphor is very strong and appealing ~
ReplyDeletewaxing rhapsodic! easy to do :)
ReplyDeleteThe moon certainly was poetry inspiring! Interesting description.
ReplyDeletethanks!
ReplyDeleteNice one!
ReplyDeletethank you!
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