In
the time
it takes to
kiss me goodbye,
you could decide that you would rather stay
wrapped in linen, stowed for a rainy day,
consecrated
like the plait
in my
hair.
Kerry's weekend challenge to the Real Toads is to try a tetractys. This is a double tetractys. Fun!
Beautiful! I love this one.
ReplyDeleteStowed for a rainy day ~ magic!!!
ReplyDeleteWhy go, when you could stay? Beautifully expressed, Marian.
ReplyDeleteWhat Kerry said.
ReplyDeleteYou are just too good at the tetractys. This is wonderful!
ReplyDeleteNice:
ReplyDelete"consecrated
like the plait
in my
hair"
And true.
The flow of this is super smooth from one idea to the next especially considering the forced brevity of it. Excellent job, Marian!!
ReplyDeleteWhat lovely choice of language. Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing layering of images braided with emotion!
ReplyDeleteI love the beauty in this one~
ReplyDeleteAh this is so good, very very good.
ReplyDeleteaw, shucks, friends. i love this form!
ReplyDeletei might have a little problem with tight forms. hee!
What Kerry said, 2nd edition.
ReplyDeletethank you :)
ReplyDeleteWow, you did a great job with this form. This is so romantic. Love it.
ReplyDeletethanks! it is romantic, isn't it? :)
ReplyDeleteYou know how I love your short forms best... and this, for whatever reason, brings to mind the passage in Romeo and Juliet about the holy palmers' kiss. Make of that what you will.
ReplyDeleteinteresting! thanks xo
ReplyDeletebeautiful, the longing to have the lover stay is palpable
ReplyDeleteyes, and thank you, ruth.
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