3.18.2012

half empty, now broken

She gripped the edge of the sink as the amber liquid circled the drain, the etched jar shattered there. Her knuckles white with strain, she marveled at the stream of blood.

It was just as well. She should slow down anyway. Her body, her temper, not to mention breaking it in rage, her beloved jar, the one that held her memories, all of it added to the long list of things she hated about herself.

Outside, children chased, playing monsters, or maybe zombies. The sun shone through budding branches and the first crocuses were up. But it was not enough.

I'm playing 100 Word Song with Lance at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog. The song is called "Satisfied," by Ashley Monroe.

16 comments:

  1. amber liquid, white knuckles, blood, zombies and crosuses.....= one of your best

    LOVED IT

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    1. i realized as i looked at this again that it's related to that one with the spider. hmmmm.

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  2. This was great. I love rhythm of this line: "The sun shone through budding branches..."

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  3. My jealousy over your style is almost to the point of being able to be bottled and sold.

    As always, nicely done!

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    1. thank you, but stop being ridiculous and get back to work.

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  4. I picture this all unfolding in your actual bathroom. Sometimes there's pain in knowing the author. Intentional or not, I'm placing you in the narrator's shoes.

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    1. kitchen! :) but, not strictly autobiographical. i did not break my favorite jelly jar in real life, no worries.

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  5. These things happen...but what a cool and gritty way to tell the tale.

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  6. Like Ollie said - cool and gritty! "It was not enough." Wow.

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  7. This entry in itself is one of the reasons (I believe) that Sir Lance started this in the first place. Because it demonstrates how 100 Words can tell a story. I LOVE IT!!!!

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  8. This has so much. Each time I read it, it tells me more of the story. I echo the other praises, I love this as well!

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  9. thanks raquel err ms baldman.

    Marian, this is one of your finest short pieces. There's wonderful rhythm to the 100. Mostly, I see your heart. excellent. can't wait to see what you do with Mike Ness and Social Distortion.

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  10. oh my heart! thank you, friends.

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