Her body sleek like a capsule, aptly called Eve,
she transports me, silently, across the river.
Sometimes I must resist the urge to accelerate
and then pull up fiercely on the parking brake.
Eve and me careening, ass over storied tin cup:
in my commuter's eye, that's how it would end.
Fireblossom challenged the Real Toads to write about bodies.
Agh, commuting! Be careful Out There:)
ReplyDeleteSounds like a runaway train...
ReplyDeleteI like the envisioned end - kind of Marian and Eve meets Thelma and Louise.
that's exactly what it is! i've been wanting to write about this for a while.
ReplyDeleteit's a horrible yet seductive image, my hand on the ER brake, watching myself fly off the road. yikes!
Seductive indeed!
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How creative to write about the body of a car! Love this: "storied tin cup"
ReplyDeleteLove this! Great take on the body...and on crashing into seduction.
ReplyDeleteI would like to auditon for the Brad Pitt character....lol!!! I might not look as good, but I can be pretty fun! Great visual, and I know about that strange sensation, that thrill, that weird dance with death...crazy good!
ReplyDeleteroad trip with Corey!
DeleteI'm loving this metaphor. :)
ReplyDeleteglad you dig it :)
DeleteMan--I can relate--I've had that very same feeling driving fast..."what if" and your mind fills in the blanks like a slo-mo of the Bolshoi Ballet. Great capture here--the word 'capsule' works perfectly, like a little bullet of meaning.
ReplyDelete:) love it, love you guys. xoxo
ReplyDeleteVery nice Marian ~ it resonates with me ~
ReplyDeleteOne minute there was road ahead of us and the next there was only sky. (Ani DiFranco)
ReplyDeleteThere's an Ani line for every moment.
Deleteso true!
DeleteSometimes it seems cars have the sleekest bodies I know. I enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteGreat write!
ReplyDeleteSo, I'm not the only one who has to resist these urges!
ReplyDeleteso beautiful to think about, the crashing and burning.
ReplyDeletewait, what?
"Eve and me careening, ass over storied tin cup:"
ReplyDeleteFreaking brilliant line, love. And I, by the way, see you and Eve flying through the stars. Capsule, indeed.
i am so predictable with the flying. thanks xoxo
ReplyDelete...storied tin cup... I am clueless to what this means... is it a reference to a movie, a place.. I googled it and came up with a golf movie... I'd love to know... !! :) Sorry I'm such a dimwit.
ReplyDelete:) nothing so highbrow, i just grew up hearing the phrase "ass over tin cup," which meant tumbling, falling hard, like head over heels, a serious tumble. like the proverbial ass over tin cup, is all i really meant, tumbling, flying through space, here.
Deletei never watched that movie! is that an arnold movie? with danny devito, maybe? not relevant to this here poem :)
I love "sleek like capsule" . This was striking and scary. I spend so much in the car. Awesome writing
ReplyDeletei'd say you spend a bit of time flying, as well.
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