2.15.2012

永延な希望の春


(the eternal hope of spring)

All sober winter
squatters riot the rosebush:
circus of sparrows.
 

Silhouette portrait
dover framed against ice sky:
mallards returning.
 

Heavy at pond's edge
frozen townsfolk await light
and grace: blue heron.

Pirate Grace has the Real Toads writing teikei (fixed-form) haiku this week. This is real haiku, not the slangy syllable-counting jazz I'm usually offering up around here. Please go and read Grace's very informative article and try it! Not so simple as it appears.

17 comments:

  1. all lovely! but I was especially taken with the first - I could just see those sparrows rioting in the rosebush (I love watching them)

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  2. I love these...the first one is my favorite..squatters riot the rosebush

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  3. Ooooh! I love these.. especially the inclusion of birds in each one. A round of applause for 'circus of sparrows'.

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  4. that's exactly what they are! :)

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  5. The birds are hope, right? fleeting, flying, creatures of tomorrow?

    i did drugs in my teens and early 20s...just saying

    i love this.

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  6. I love the 'circus of sparrows'! All three haikus are very good, but that first one is my fav.

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  7. those sparrows are so entertaining, i could wax on about them far longer than haiku allows.
    dozens of them, right outside our window, in the rosebush, chirping away, all winter long. adorable!

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  8. Oh these are so beautifully and perfectly penned! I especially love the heron.....wowzers, kiddo!

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  9. Beautiful. So many seem to be writing a breath of spring into their winter haiku! There is a blue heron in a park nearby here. At least he/she arrives in summer. A beautiful sight indeed.

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  10. ten point for 'circus of sparrows' :)
    the avian theme threads these like small, stringed jewels.
    not to mention, these all have (for me) a color element. 'rosebush' in the first, 'ice skies' in the second, and 'blue heron' in the third, all speak of shade and hue. a beautiful collection.

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  11. They all rocked but the first one may have been my favorite of the challenge....niiiiiice!

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  12. :) that is very kind, thank you!

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  13. That first stanza is remarkable, you.

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  14. thanks, you. the sparrows are really remarkable!

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  15. do private comments
    justify my quiet way?
    my neglect will cease!

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