1.19.2012

tanaga!

1.
The golden arches beckon.
Hungry travelers reckon,
"Just once." No condemnation,
I understand temptation.
 

 2.
Ride me like a ferris wheel.
Let's rock the carriage and steal
a kiss when we reach the top.
The top! Oh! Please! Never stop. 

 3.
Alone is the saddest word,
E minor is the bluest chord.
Your guitar laments the end,
solo, grieving for your friend.

Pirate Grace challenged the Real Toads to write a tanaga, a tight and rhyming traditional 4-line poem, heavy on metaphor, originating in the Phillipines. It's harder than it looks, but I know you're up for a challenge. Try it!

9 comments:

  1. There you are!
    I love each of them. All the lines came out lilting and fun and the when I hit the e minor line it was like a hand pressed against my chest and said "Slow down and pay attention to this one."

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  2. Each tanaga is beautiful in its own right, but I love the third for its bluesy melancholy.

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  3. I like the first two best. I caved and went to Mickey D's for the first time in ages, the other day. They put the "nutrition" info on the packaging, now. I won't be going back. it was even worse than I thought! (but tasted good. Ha!)

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    1. i get coffee on my way to work at the McD drive-thru most mornings, but i would never eat. the coffee thing is new, because now around these parts you can get delicious organic Paul Newman dark coffee in any size for a buck. sometimes enduring the smell of the fryers coming around the back of the building is revolting first thing in the morning.

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  4. Wow, so much passion and emotion in all three! Well Done~

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  5. For such a difficult form, you really showed emotion and character.

    "Alone is the saddest word" = beautiful

    awesome Marian

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  6. A difficult form for the phonetically challenged like me, and you did it not once but three times, perfectly!

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  7. It's number 1 for me. Fantastic!

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  8. aw, thanks, friends! this form is intriguing. i expect i'll try some more.

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