1.13.2012

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you owe me none,
& if it's true now, why not then?
you owe me none
of anything that's left undone.
let's dance to the jig forgotten,
obligations be verboten.
you owe me none.

17 comments:

  1. Love the sentiment of this poem.
    eden

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  2. The rondelet form really works well here. Very nicely done!

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  3. Tom would be proud. One of my favorite songs of his is "Nobody", which is just about this short. I think he would like the forgotten/verboten rhyme, too.

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  4. This is great and I love the German inclusion as well.

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  5. Those first four lines should be carved in stone, and the rounding off in the last three - just amazing.

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  6. aw, you lovely friends. you owe me nothing! :)

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  7. you had me at verboten.

    seriously, I like the flow of these words and the sentiment.

    You me none, either, Maid Marian

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  8. "and if it's true now, why not then?"
    A perfect line in a perfect little poem.
    Enjoyed this prompt very much. Thanks!
    K

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  9. Owed nothing, but deserving of all... you, my friend, are brill.

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  10. Nice rhythm, especially:

    let's dance to the jig forgotten,
    obligations be verboten

    (even though I had to look up verboten)

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  11. Right to the core of it, straight and sharp as an arrow.

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  12. Love the way you point out a truth-eternal and universal with both ease and depth.

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  13. he (or she)'s just left the bar, and the other party rushes after him (her) to get some closure. from the other end of the alley, just as he's about to turn the corner, he tosses back these words.
    completely rocked this one.

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  14. maybe and thank you! :)
    i'm working on another one inspired by Tom, we'll see if it materializes.

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