1.13.2012

released

you owe me none,
& if it's true now, why not then?
you owe me none
of anything that's left undone.
let's dance to the jig forgotten,
obligations be verboten.
you owe me none.
Posted by Marian at 12:30 PM
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17 comments:

  1. Eden BayleeJanuary 13, 2012 at 1:36 PM

    Love the sentiment of this poem.
    eden

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  2. Mary MansfieldJanuary 13, 2012 at 1:45 PM

    The rondelet form really works well here. Very nicely done!

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  3. FireblossomJanuary 13, 2012 at 2:05 PM

    Tom would be proud. One of my favorite songs of his is "Nobody", which is just about this short. I think he would like the forgotten/verboten rhyme, too.

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  4. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 13, 2012 at 2:38 PM

    Love it, Marian.

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  5. cosmos camiJanuary 13, 2012 at 2:56 PM

    This is great and I love the German inclusion as well.

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  6. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 13, 2012 at 3:44 PM

    Those first four lines should be carved in stone, and the rounding off in the last three - just amazing.

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  7. MarianJanuary 13, 2012 at 4:44 PM

    aw, you lovely friends. you owe me nothing! :)

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  8. LanceJanuary 13, 2012 at 5:05 PM

    you had me at verboten.

    seriously, I like the flow of these words and the sentiment.

    You me none, either, Maid Marian

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  9. Kay L. DaviesJanuary 13, 2012 at 5:22 PM

    "and if it's true now, why not then?"
    A perfect line in a perfect little poem.
    Enjoyed this prompt very much. Thanks!
    K

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  10. AnonymousJanuary 13, 2012 at 6:26 PM

    Owed nothing, but deserving of all... you, my friend, are brill.

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  11. Laurie KolpJanuary 13, 2012 at 9:50 PM

    Nice rhythm, especially:

    let's dance to the jig forgotten,
    obligations be verboten

    (even though I had to look up verboten)

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  12. MarianJanuary 14, 2012 at 11:07 AM

    :) fun rhymes for sure!

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  13. hedgewitchJanuary 14, 2012 at 11:19 AM

    Right to the core of it, straight and sharp as an arrow.

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  14. Kim NelsonJanuary 14, 2012 at 6:39 PM

    Love the way you point out a truth-eternal and universal with both ease and depth.

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  15. shawnacyJanuary 15, 2012 at 3:41 AM

    he (or she)'s just left the bar, and the other party rushes after him (her) to get some closure. from the other end of the alley, just as he's about to turn the corner, he tosses back these words.
    completely rocked this one.

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  16. MarianJanuary 15, 2012 at 8:58 AM

    maybe and thank you! :)
    i'm working on another one inspired by Tom, we'll see if it materializes.

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