12.15.2011

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with your carbon-copy progeny,
you look like you stepped out
of a jeans commercial, still.


freckling for all you are worth,
your dazzling close-up smile
hides the ills of twenty years.


my memory of you, wine-soaked,
out-of-bounds. that you were.
you are perfect for the beach.


but, you know, i guess if mine
was a furniture-catalog family,
i would put us on display, too.

14 comments:

  1. wow. striking phrasing and powerful delivery with a tinge of sarcasm...perfect mix! Nice!

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  2. I picture this all in the washed out tones of a 90's Abercrombie catalog...

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  3. One thing is for sure - you can never know a person by assessing their manner or appearance. People are all icebergs. Both the song and this poem say it all too clearly.

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  4. I know a few of those furniture-catalog families,... and I know all about the whole familial facade thing and I gotta say it makes me sad when I see it now but understand the necessity sometimes

    stinging and witty as ever, girl

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  5. Well said. I remember some of those furniture-catalog families. I don't know many of them now, however.
    An excellent post.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  6. LOVE it. "freckling for all you are worth"...get out. "perfect for the beach"...the last stanza...did I mention that I love this?

    PS--the Ron Sexsmith cd that I have and like so well is called "Retriever."

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  7. Love this! Those picture perfect, carbon copy families are so annoying! I like to think of all the awful things that go on behind closed doors to make myself feel better!

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  8. i know, right?
    it ended up snarky and bitterish.
    not my favorite attributes, to tell the truth.

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  9. Yes, teeth! (big grin) What a cool take on the prompt, Marian! I love it.

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  10. Wow. "A furniture-catalogue family." Wonderfully said. Love the tinge of sarcasm in this poem. A very creative take on the prompt.

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  11. Great Work...I have run across some furniture catalogue families...all perfection on the outside but a mess inside

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