10.12.2011

wild filly

what
if i rode
chincoteague's misty
across the dunes behind your
eyes?
you
would see my fiercest loyal,
galloping-hearted,
stormy true
self.

7 comments:

  1. anonymous?

    http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2011/10/mini-challenge-for-sunday.html

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  2. Oh I am so pleased you tried this form, Marian, and I have to say this is my favourite. Your words and images dominate the form - I found the second part particularly powerful. You are queen of micro-forms.

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  3. hah! THANK YOU, kerry.
    QUEEN. i am putting that on the back cover of my collection of short poems :)

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  4. Beautiful I love the energy, the riding away in the first part and galloping back in the second - the two parts practically seamless. And who can resist "chincoteague's misty" - not I :)

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  5. Marian, I esp like the way you have used the form here as a question and response, it has a magical dreamy feel to it with the slightly surreal construction of your images. Beautiful piece!

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  6. thanks!
    misty of chincoteague has stayed with me all these many years...

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