10.16.2011

emerald city

who are
all these strange folk
wanting to take a peek
behind my moribund curtain?
i should
take note:
replace utilitarian
textile with voile portieres,  
spread the drapes wide
open.

12 comments:

  1. Hm ... a Cinquain of much suggestion. I love it.

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  2. only you, my love, can combine moribund and voile in the same poem...

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  3. Were ever two more intricately woven lines as these ever seen in the modest cinquain?
    ...replace utilitarian
    textile with voile portieres...

    I doubt it. Top drawer poetry!

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  4. Wow!
    This is one of my faves!
    I will have writing time this week, and you have inspired me to go for the Cinquain. I really love its lyrical quality.

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  5. hah. i was going for gauzy long panels, mosquito netting even, replacing heavy dark drapes and then flung wide open!
    how many poems do i have, so far, about fabric? hmmm.

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  6. love your visit to the emerald city and your ideas to redecorate it :)

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  7. Is "spread the drapes wide open" sarcastic or is it being comfortable with who you are and saying f you to the world?

    loved it, Marian

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  8. Reveal the man behind the screen--or the woman behind the curtain--a tall order most of us might balk at--presented like a flying flag here. Can't say how much I've enjoyed reading all your linked cinquains (at with Real Toads,) and several of your other poems as well--so you'll have to just look behind the curtain. You are really at home in this form. Glad to have found your blog.

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  9. :) thanks, everyone.
    hedgewitch, welcome, i'm glad you are here!
    lance? neither. but you interpret it as it makes sense for you!

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