runaway sentence.: loup rouge

9.23.2011

loup rouge

you bit off tails
& ate my trail crumbs,
chased me down corridors,
up endless stairs,
cornered me at the crucible
where i learned to defend,
bracingly.

17 comments:

CDGSeptember 23, 2011 at 2:19 PM
This red wolf frightens, save for the upturn at "bracingly."
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AnonymousSeptember 23, 2011 at 2:28 PM
Sont les mots qui vont tres bien ensemble.
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Kerry O'ConnorSeptember 23, 2011 at 2:59 PM
That's a turn up for the books. A good defense can be better than a random offensive after all.
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Mystic_MomSeptember 24, 2011 at 10:14 AM
Nicely done!
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WyomingDivaSeptember 25, 2011 at 10:34 AM
Clever and vivid image!
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Sherry Blue SkySeptember 25, 2011 at 2:19 PM
Good one, Marian!
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Old RavenSeptember 25, 2011 at 4:36 PM
Oh how I love the wolf!
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Jo BryantSeptember 25, 2011 at 7:47 PM
interesting
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MarySeptember 25, 2011 at 7:49 PM
Clever!
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MarianSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:24 AM
aw, thanks. watch out for that guy.
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magicinthebackyardSeptember 27, 2011 at 7:19 AM
Ahhh so clever! You have a way with brevity! Great post.
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MarianSeptember 27, 2011 at 11:30 AM
thank you :)
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Gemma WisemanSeptember 30, 2011 at 5:45 AM
A red, a dangerous hunter trailing its prey! Tense!
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Old OllieSeptember 30, 2011 at 8:54 AM
Red Wolf - that is bad.
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EllaSeptember 30, 2011 at 11:04 AM
I feel chased; well done
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MorningOctober 1, 2011 at 1:36 PM
powerful.
love the verbs your use.
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MarianOctober 1, 2011 at 3:57 PM
ah, thanks.
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