5.31.2011

charmed

crossing the clearing
rocky widest riverbed
mullein, blue chicory
dragonfly anne's lace
tread on loose gravel
and reach the summit.

there he was

sunning
basking
waiting
preying

surprised, i jumped.

then held back
licked my lips
waited for him
to notice mine

watching
quivering
preening
preparing

as i approached
he twitched just
slightly, feeling
the ground vibrate
forked tongue out &
in out & in flickered
sensing my approach as
i crept slowly sloowwly
curious wanton desiringly

without fear

and
then
snap!

his eyes on mine

fast
faster
waves on
undulating
lateral waves

face to face
close to close

too close

as i melted
in his eyes
his strikes
left me raw
limp undone

prostrate
procumbent
and ready.

methodically precise
his devouring began
with my baby toes
tongue tickling
up my calves
pausing
for
a nibble
of my thighs
taking his time
with all of me til
he was inside me and
i inside of him fully

devoured
digested

eaten alive.
My Indie Ink writing challenge this week came from Barb Black of Black Ink Pad, who challenged me to compare a loved one to an animal. Of course my old man is a fox, but this was more fun to write.

30 comments:

  1. hot :) "as I melted/in his eyes/ his strikes/left me raw".... rawr.

    btw - you're on the blogroll, so quit whining. (but I see I'm not on yours. hmph.) <3

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  2. Very effective. I like this poem a lot.

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  3. I'll admit I am scared of snakes, but this snake might have changed my outlook. Sexy.

    xx

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  4. devoured? ah, yes. mmmmmmmmmmmmmm

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  5. well as long as you are happy in the devouring...its not a bad thing you know..smiles...well played...

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  6. It's got sort of a Duran Duran feel to it...

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  7. I fun battle of the emotions in this... fear and desire.

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  8. hungry like the snake! hissssssss!

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  9. this is breathtakingly lovely and sensuous :D

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  10. Totally sensuous and kind of scary! I love it.

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  11. hah! i love these comments. boo!

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  12. Wow! I was caught up in the passion and sensuality of this poem, not to mention the interesting shape it took upon the page (forked tongue and all).

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  13. That's the first time I've looked at a snake in a positive light.

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  14. I wasn't sure if I should be scared or not...great write :)

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  15. "devoured
    digested

    eaten alive."

    Oh hell woman, I'm not sure if my tingles are from sensual temptation or sheer terror! Nicely done!

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  16. always better to go with the sex :)

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  17. sensuous, sexy, full of desires, dangerous, and just plain raw with basic emotions. LOVED it!!! I love, love, love a poem that can take me into a journey. So far I have not been able to produce one like this, so I appreciate one every time I see it. Bravo! Thank you for stopping by at my blog earlier in the week.

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  18. By the way, Marian, thank you for adding me to Poets United as you said on your comment on my blog. You were asking for my email? It's lnfjourney@gmail.com or pohonolive@gmail.com. Either one is fine. Thank you.

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  19. Fucking sexy as hell. Felt this. Superb job.

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  20. very snakey, indeed,.... can hear the hiss of desire in the grass

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