4.10.2011

pica

he cleans
unspeakable
  barking
  gnashing
  until

i am dirty

he cleans after me
silent
  growling
  glowering

he cleans

i crawl 

across the floor
to reach the dirt.

18 comments:

  1. that is so sad. very unhealthy. great write :)

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  2. last post by robin http://mysecretinnuendo.com (profile selector not working)

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  3. i crawl
    across the floor
    to reach the dirt.

    The best ending on a poem in a while for me:D Very well written poem as a whole!

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  4. great poem! great title! gritty, or should i say "dirty?"

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  5. An interesting poem! The layout adds to its effectiveness, makes you read it real slow.

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/evolution-in-a-nutshell/

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  6. I love it, there is a rawness about the words and placement, perfect!

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  7. yuks haha! you really brought out the feeling! mines here~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/18/natures-gravity/

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  8. your words are insightful and wonderful.

    A++

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  9. This is quite an intriguing piece. I really enjoyed it several times. The ending is really tough.

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  10. So, you're a dirty girl, is that it? ;)

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  11. would that it was, that was it.

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  12. I was reminded of how I used to scrape the walls and eat when I was a kid. :)

    Ingenious stuff.

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  13. Awards for you, thanks for the support!

    Share a free verse today,

    Bless your talent.

    Xxx



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