4.21.2011

the good death

i can take it
start with my feet
give me your weight

when you are done
rains like brushes
ritching my temples

i will expire
in a flushy flurry

carry on.
Posted by Marian at 10:07 PM
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15 comments:

  1. Eric 'Bubba' AlderApril 22, 2011 at 9:10 AM

    This would make a nice last speech for a snowman. (Except for the feet part - unless you make the snowman with feet, of course)

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  2. Danny Earl SimmonsApril 22, 2011 at 9:21 AM

    Terrific poem.

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  3. MarianApril 22, 2011 at 9:26 AM

    ah, thanks xo

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  4. MariApril 22, 2011 at 5:05 PM

    Thanks for leaving a comment on my blog. Actually, I'm doubly thankful because it led me here - to your fabulous words. Great poem, but you should know that as a mom who said "use your words" so often that my bird learned the phrase, you actually had me at your profile summary.

    Looking forward to reading more. I've added a bookmark so I can come poke around when I'm not supposed to be working.

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  5. MarianApril 22, 2011 at 7:16 PM

    aw, Mari. i was totally blown away by your tribute to your daughter. mutual admiration is delicious :)

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  6. CDG @ Move Over Mary Poppins!April 23, 2011 at 10:09 AM

    carry on, indeed!

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  7. MarianApril 23, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    carried away, maybe.

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  8. Brian MillerApril 26, 2011 at 6:13 PM

    love your words...ritch...nice...i am melting...

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  9. MarianApril 26, 2011 at 6:16 PM

    well, mission accomplished, then. melt away!

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  10. John (@bookdreamer)April 27, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    May it be the death of you choice! I did a poem around that theme last week but yours is so much more to the point, lol.

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  11. MarianApril 27, 2011 at 4:15 PM

    ha! that's me mostly, no spare words.
    thanks for visiting, loved your poem, too.

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  12. OliviaApril 28, 2011 at 5:54 AM

    This is terrific!
    Loved the expression very much..

    Hugs xx

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  13. MarianApril 28, 2011 at 9:22 AM

    thanks xx

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  14. Kerry O'ConnorApril 29, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    Excellently evocative as always, Marian. You work never disappoints.

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  15. MarianApril 30, 2011 at 3:07 PM

    aw, Kerry, thank you, that is very nice to hear.

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