3.16.2011

a whole nother

aw, man
what's the plan
are you nowhere
noway
nohow 
and what
aw, shucks

what the fuck 
a ways away
you okay
a whole nother
place to stay 
you 
the real deal
gonna steal 
what's real
i can feel
you now
oh
yeah baby
i can
sure as hell
feel you now
oh yes i can feel you now.

11 comments:

  1. holy crap! you wrote a lot, today!

    this one's a saucy one, eh? i particularly enjoy the use of the word "fuck" in the rhyme scheme.

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  2. Great rhythm to this one, Marian! Love it!

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  3. aw, shucks, i guess it does rhyme.

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  4. i hear a rhyme, for sure, but in different places.

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  5. like way away across the universe?

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  6. I love "a whole nother." I say that all the time.

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  7. i know, sister! right?
    it's one of those things i would actively try to lose from my speaking but for how adorable it is.
    it might the the only thing like that.

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  8. been reading this again and again all day.
    I love it.
    my favorite of the new ones...

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  9. you just like it when i use the word fuck. ;)

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  10. A fantastic read; therefore, a fantastic write.

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