2.23.2011

boyfriend

you're the one
our stolen hour just begun
dark comfy reverie
outta my head never leave
your insolent heart on my sleeve.

(My first try with yummy frosting.)

13 comments:

  1. Brilliant! Just friggin' brilliant!

    (And I don't mean friggin' either!)

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  2. well, i'm not sure about *brilliant* but it was fucking fun to write.

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  3. I know, right? (Write?)
    Easy, but not too easy.
    Tricky, but not too tricky.

    [APPLAUSE]

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  4. three cheers for you! hip hip hooray!

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  5. nice!
    It is fun and I am so against rhyming...

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  6. Rhyming can be fun
    If it's properly done
    It's fun to do
    You know it's true
    And now I have to run


    (And that applauase was for Marian, not me)

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  7. Ha! Excellent! I just now commented on Eric's first Frost and the explanation of the form. This one looks good. Was just saying I have invented three so far, my Octain really taken off, over fifty been written so far (only four by me). If you're interested, my second is here -

    http://lukepraterswordsalad.com/2010/12/17/the-sculptor/

    Nice work above, and nice work Eric, great to see it catching on. I will have to give it a try! My latest is a sonnet form but too complex I think to catch on majorly

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  8. i'm always game for a challenge, luke, i'll check em out.

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  9. That Luke, he never misses an opportunity to pimp-out his Octains. (LOL!)

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  10. for serious. good thing we like Luke.

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  11. LMAO...I thought the same thing about luke pimping his Octains - although, I'd pimp it to if I created it....oh, man, I am still laughing.

    btw, kick-ass Frost, Marian! :)

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  12. thanks! it's a fun thing to write.
    though for some reason i have it in my mind that it's a frosting. hee!

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  13. Writing a Frost is offically called "Frosting" now.

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