1.09.2011

dancing on the jetty

who are you?
i would have passed by
but for your words
 
green ebbs and waves
know but do not
conflate and conjure

my sailing ballast
mooring by rock anchor
greening my senses
reaching the quay's end
with you.

(The title of this poem is a reference to the song of the same name by INXS, from their 1985 album The Swing. "Watch the world argue, argue with itself. Who's gonna teach me peace and happiness?")

23 comments:

  1. I always appreciate a word play and how they pair with other words. I quite enjoyed this poem.

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  2. I enjoyed the way you wove the color green through this creating a visual image on which you hang the power of words.

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  3. lovely word play.
    enjoyed the imagery.

    A++

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  4. Playing with words in to a powerful poetry.
    Thanks for sharing.

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  5. I loved it! "with you" as the last line was perfect. I caught my breath.

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  6. lovely ending! here’s my new year potluck- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/03/15/life/

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  7. A poem I had to read, both to fully understand and because I loved the flow of the words. Well written!

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/01/07/my-best-friend/

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  8. "who are you?
    i would have passed by
    but for your words
    green ebbs and waves"
    so pretty.
    INXS!!

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  9. yay! i really felt like i had to acknowledge that, although the poem is not really related to the song. love that title, though. and oh so fantastic to see michael hutchence in that video. he was incredible. i saw them many times back in the day (are you paying attention, eric alder?)
    sigh.

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  10. i love the way you ask the poem who are you? i do this too in my writing...

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  11. Very good play on the words...most enjoyable.

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  12. ah thank you, kind people.
    who are you? ;)

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  13. The poetry groups keep growing, so now that you're posting in them, don't be too surprised if new people start showing up here.

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  14. Well, it won't hurt that your stuff is so good.

    You can always tell because your comments grow and grow.

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