10.24.2010

fall mood

cold wind
leaves down
month's end
sputtering

box wine
shirt riding
full belly
pining

autumn red
fading brown
far away
feeling

blue.

10 comments:

  1. I love the structure and the music to this one.

    And the colors in the last stanza.

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  2. thank you, love. me, too.
    i'm gonna read this one out loud.

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  3. That Providence GuyOctober 24, 2010 at 10:15 PM

    One word:

    Florida

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  4. i concede that you are totally on to something.
    You. Are. Right.

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  5. That second stanza?

    With the shirt riding and the pining?

    Oh, I like that very much.

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  6. thanks. i really hate when shirts ride.

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  7. "far away
    feeling

    blue"

    I love the space between, very much like you are trying desperately to think of the right word.

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  8. You sure love your box wine!

    My dad loves box wines too. I'm not much of a wine person myself. I prefer beer or something stronger, like rum or bourbon.

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  9. i discovered the cheap joy of boxed wine recently. i would not describe myself as loving it! ;)

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